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Please, please, please!!!! I hope you update soon! This is one of my favorite pairings and it isn't done enough nor as well as you have started. I hope to read more soon

I like the way you have started this fic! This pairing is so underwritten, please please continue!!

Excellent! I love the story so far, and cannt wait for more! please update soon!

I really wish you'd continue this. I have yet to see a good full story of these two.

Ah, thank you. I have been looking for this pairing for so long. I'm surprised it's not more popular.

Uh, you need to clear your sentence construction and grammar. it\'s hard work figuring out who the hell thought or did what. you could try chopping up some long sentences and paying attention to continuity...
Good luck!

I thought it was a quite good chapter. If you feel that you can make it even better, I look forward to see more. Maybe you should edit the beginning a bit, since the introduction to the background was a bit confusing.

Also, Hinamori couldn\'t help with Hitsugaya because he recovered before her. Unless you\'re changing things a bit for your fic\'s sake. But in that case you should put a warning.

I think Unohana (I feel weird calling her Retsu, it almost sounds as a male name) and Yume were very well written. By the way, Renji called Yume \'Hisagui-san\', when her last name is Takani.

The only thing I disliked was the whole \'the spirit of his dead wife comes to talk to him in his sleep\' part. I\'ve never liked that plot device, but those are my own personal tastes.

Wow!!! Finally I see a fic with my favorite pairing in Bleach fandom, well I must say good work and please update very soon cause I can\'t wait to read more of this piece of art.

My, my you posted here to. Well Like I said before this fic is amazing and looks promising and I can\'t wait to read more, but don\'t do more run-up sentences. Please update soon

Interesting start. It\'s kind of hard to tell where you\'re going with it just yet, but it should be fun. I love Byakuya. ^_^ I noticed that there are many places where your wording is a little awkward or you use a double negative, which makes some of your sentences a bit hard to read and understand, but it\'s nothing a good beta won\'t be able to fix. You should check the aff beta group; I\'m sure they\'d be able to find one for you. Keep writing. ^_^