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for Growing up

by yamijay

person ariala
schedule January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Toushiro is so kawaii, the fic is really good, so please continue.

If the Oocness makes shiro more kawaii, then I don`t have a problem with it.

Looking forward to your next update.
person ku
schedule January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
quite a strange idea, but I hope you keep the story up!
person akirei
schedule January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
so far so good. you did well with the characterizations, i think they were very much in character. hehehe... i'd like to read more of your story, since its really off to a good start.
person luv69
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
when are you going to update? the chars aren't OOC, who cares if your new to it?! the fic is good, and i want more!
person nickel
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Look, I like the idea and the story. Now that I've let you know that (as requested in the A/N), I think you ought to update a new chapter. Really. You could just.. tip your hand, let loose a few more pages of it, and a lot of readers, like me, will be all the happier for it-! >u/
person Daisuke
schedule January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really really really the Fanfiction! *.*
It´s so sweet.
And I seriously would like to read more of it.
I don´t actually think that the chara are to OOC. Maybe some, but I couldn´t even say right now who.
So Pleeeeaaaase write more of it.
I like tha Chars, the Idea, the Story so fra an your writing to. *thumbs up*
ByeBye *g*
by Daisuke. *smiles*
person cerinity
schedule January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is good so far! The story line is original and seems...well thought out? Anyway its good! You said it would be shounen-ai, so is Hitsugaya going to end up with Ichigo? That would be my first impression, but im not good at these things *sweatdrops*. Anyway, this is good and i cant wait to read the next chapter!
person evilchild (not signed in)
schedule January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I just want to point out that you have a couple of mistakes. Like you had put a 'good' fever. It doesn't make sense. You can't have a good fever. Aside from the mistakes (maybe you should find a beta? I can help if you'd like. Just e-mail me.) I really do like this and can't wait to read more!
person evilchild (not signed in)
schedule January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
my e-mail is kim_04303542004@yahoo.com if you want help.
person jordan
schedule January 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great fic keep goin im sure itll be a very good fic just from readin the first chapter