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by Carola

person Silver Wolf
schedule July 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Still not bad, but you could do better neh! Mitte.

"He seemed less uptight, at least *not to* Renji anyway." See, that made no sense really ^^. Sure, I know what you meant but when you type things incorrectly like that, I suppose it distracts the reader. You most likely meant, "He seemed less uptight, at least *to* Renji anyway."

Get that beta, ne?