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Bossy!Orihime is scary XD
Very cute OrihimexUryu <3

Awww another cute moment for this wonderful pair!!! The more I read, the more I like!!! This is written rather well too, I might add. Yay!!!

Awww! I'm so glad I'm not the only one who considered that pairing. Good job!

This is a good litte story and that first reviewer is crazy. Inoue isn't shy! She walked right into the Vaizoreds headquarters and asked to use the bathroom. She's got some real guts sometimes. I can see her being a hellcat in bed too. As for Ishida, I think every guy feels a little unworthy at times, especially around perfect girls like Inoue.
Those pants in the manga were pretty hilarious. I'm glad someone else noticed that.

Loved it, though to be honest, you could probably write a one-shot for "Ishida and Orihime read the phone book" and I'd love that too. :) This was fun, with a little of the fluffy (and Bleach needs its fluff!), and sweet; I think they're still IC, for all that.

Obviously, the fanbrat who reviewed first doesn't comprehend that with human beings, what you see is rarely what you get (or, sadly, the concept of a complete sentence).

Whoa there flame-oh-hoay! Ok sorry about the dofous who didn't like this wonderful pairing but you are an amazing writer and I loved this sweet hot one shot. I was just going to say how much I enjoyed it but I am very challenged to reply to the undeserving flame you received. This RAFB person clearly dosen't understand the deeper thoughts of human nature. Just because Ishida is very self confident normaly does NOT mean that he doesn't have doubts about himself in the dark of night, lying in bed, questioning if he is as worthy as his grandfather. Also Ohihime isn't exactly the shy-ist thing around, but even barring that in a commited relationship a woman is a lot more open and free to explore herself in safety of being judged by your loved one. Oh and I LOVED the squ-words!!!! The poetry and language you used set a cute, sweet and sexy tone for the whole story. I love everything you have done and I want to thank you so much for taking the time to give us your talent and vision. I really look forward to reading new stories from you and truely enjoy your work. You make me happy.

to RAFB: So at last you review a story of mine on this site. I have to say that I've been flattered beyond giggles at your constant attention to my fics, rating them with 1's and continuing to read them even though you claim to dislike them. Your statement that you cannot abhor "OOC crack" gives you away, and exposes you for the narrow, bitter "my word is the final word on interpreting these characters and I own them, not Kubo or Perriot Studios" fangurl that you are. I'm usually patient with even the most impolite critism, but you've obviously got an obsession up your butt with me. Get a life.

Heya Debbie-chan. Long time, no see, ne? I thought this one was cute, and I saw the cover of the manga and just couldn't help myself as I broke out into a snorting fit of giggles. The pants...were definitely sexy. You know that I'm primarily a Yaoi writer and that on occasion, I've done some Het, (Breath of Sorrow in the DBZ Section encompassing both) but I just didn't feel the connection in this one.

Personally, I think you write Yaoi much more emotionally and powerfully than you write Het, and while I can tolerate OOC'ness to a point, no matter how cute this story was, it was still a bit extreme for me. But to each their own, ne? Otherwise, your grammar, as always, was impeccable, and I enjoyed the imagery.

The more smut, the happier! Thanks for the read, Debbie-chan.

I'd like to know exactly where the criticism of OOC-ness is coming from because I'm not seeing it.

Basic critique: 1) There were some words missing here and there but I'm not gonna sweat it because there will some words missing in this review so we cancel each other out; 2) Orihime is in character (Shy? With Ishida? Since when? The girl started undressing in front of Ishida in the SS arc!) although I would prefer to see more of the self-esteem hiccups that she possesses that make her more human (this is a failing of mine, but sweet, perfect, good at everything Hime makes me roll my eyes), but this is a PWP story, so again, I'm not gonna sweat it; 3) Ishida is spot on; 4) since it is established that Ishida and Orihime are already intimate, then the unusual level of ardor by both characters is not "OOC" as the story notes that they are more hot for each other than usual but that's fairly reasonable and, dare I say it, realistic since a couple's level of desire is dynamic, not static.

All in all, a nice, sensual PWP story for two nice characters and an unusual pair of pants.

'Kay, well, to put it blatantly, I dunno why you bother writing this pairing. I'm a fan of crack, 'n all, but OOC crack is something I cannot cope with.

I'll explain.

Ishida is a Quincy, and therefore, is vain and stuffed full of so much pride, it could probably circle the world three times over.
Which cancels out what you said about 'unworthy arms'.
Orihime is a very very very very VERY shy girl, and will therefore not be dominant.
Which means that this should be marked with an 'OOC' warning.

I think the only things you got right in this entire fic was that this was a PWP, and that Ishida is damn well shocked.

Well, Ja.

R.A.F.B

(PS, you used 'squ-' words too much.)