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February 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
come come! Update further my dearest!
Pretty please with a cherry on top... *pouts*
Dit verhaaltje od Stalkerloverrrrr, pweaseeeeee
Pretty please with a cherry on top... *pouts*
Dit verhaaltje od Stalkerloverrrrr, pweaseeeeee
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January 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You made it longer! Yay!
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The idea seems interesting, but you should work on it more. There are many mistakes which are easy to avoid, you just have to spend some time on checking it. I wonder if you at least read it before posting. If not, you should.
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay! nu nog een awesome verhaaltje! Maar niet Stalker lover verwaarlozen, neh? want dies ook awesome
Ik denk dat ik ut nog un x ga rereaden XP
Update soon! ~Yaoi is in the air~
Ik denk dat ik ut nog un x ga rereaden XP
Update soon! ~Yaoi is in the air~
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
(PS) But mannn, ben jij psychic ofzo? Ik heb in mijn verhaaltje ook al Ichigo's hele familie uitgemoord!
Wat kan ik zeggen; Genius minds think the same, neh? XP
~Yaoi is in the air~ <3
Wat kan ik zeggen; Genius minds think the same, neh? XP
~Yaoi is in the air~ <3
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It seemed a little too hurried for my tastes. That fact that it is an AU came as a surprise though. I suggest slowing down a bit in the next chapter and explain things better with more detail if possible. Why did you change Shuuhei's number to 96? And I can tell you are using single quotes instead of double quotes by how they look. You also need to work on your spelling.
Overall, I thought the story has potential but it needs work. Ah, don't look at this review in a bad way. I'm just pointing things out that you may want to take into consideration. I like the idea of Ichigo as a slave so I really do want to read more.
Overall, I thought the story has potential but it needs work. Ah, don't look at this review in a bad way. I'm just pointing things out that you may want to take into consideration. I like the idea of Ichigo as a slave so I really do want to read more.