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Just doing what you asked, and I'm back to Chapter 4. No errors until the fifth to last stanza of Chapter 4, wherein you said "All of the sudden," whereas the correct whatchamacallit is "All of A sudden." Hope I'm not seeming too anal-retentive, but I'm not sure how in-depth you wanted my proofreading to be. Hope my feedback gets feedback! -JHH

You wrote "All of the sudden" again when the Menos showed up in Chapter 5. Just revising, like you asked.

Just rereading the story, trying to pick up on stuff. Just a few things I noticed. Instead of unbelief, the word is disbelief. You also said naval to refer to the belly-button, when the term is navel. It's just some small things with homophones. Oh! Just remembered! It's per se, not per say. Not sure what language that's from, though. Probably Latin. It always is. Hope I didn't come off sounding pretentious with the pointers. Great work, I can say with absolute certainty that you are my favorite author on AFF and the reason I joined. -JHH

Just wanted to make a little note here: Ichigo was 9 when he mother died and Karin and Yuzu were 4. If Ichigo had been 4 they wouldn't be there.


Other thank that and the random pairings every so often I really like this story so far and can't wait to read more.

Not sure if this is my fourth or fifth time reading your story... More than I've read a single piece of fanfiction, surely, or all fiction, for that matter. Hope you can post more stories soon! JHH

You know, you remind me a bit of Daniel-Day Lewis. But rather than There Will be Blood, There Will be Similes! :P Just kidding! JHH

As you may have guess from my other reviews, Tatsuki is my favorite character. Not sure why, but I would have to say that her character is almost a mirror image of what I would look for in a female in real life.

In the terms of the Bleach universe, I feel she is way under used, and even in the fan fic universe not a lot of attention is paid to her. It truly is nice to see someone capture (what I feel) is her character so perfectly.

When I was reading this story (already finished it 3 times) it felt like I was reading a full on novel. In a way, it was because the story was already finished by the time I found it, and I didn't have to wait for a new chapter to come out, it was already all there and I could immerse myself in the full story from the get go.

To say your style of writing is "good" is an understatement. It captured exactly what I envisioned the characters doing in these situations, and you really put a lot of emotion into your writing. You could feel the characters tears, or their anger. You could feel the love between Tatsuki and Ichigo.

I can say this without a doubt, this is one of the greatest stories I have ever had the pleasure of reading.

On a side note, I would literally kill for another story focusing on Ichigo/Tatsuki that filled in the gaps between the end of this story, its epilogue, and the beginning of "A New Window". You just can't have too much Tatsuki stories...

9.98/10

Third time reading this story, first time reviewing! I can't even give constructive criticism, except that the word is technically rigid, not ridged. Rigid means stiff, ridged means having ridges. But I digress. Keep em' coming!

wow I found a Tatsuki and ichigo fanfic, AWSOME!! bout damn time, not enough of this pair on here so you can bet I'll be reading, I really hope you gave Tatsuki a a shikai and maybe a bankai in thi fic, it'b be a shame for her to never release her Zanpakutoh, but I'm sure you have just haven't read it yet, but if you didn't you should be shot bluntly put lol, anyway love the sotry thus far but's 4 in the freakin morening and I have to sleep so I have to stop *cries on the keboard* but I'll pick up with ch. 7 in a few hours so you'll hear from me again soon

Awesome I just read the first part and was all sad because I suspected there would be no more! But look! You have heaps more! I'm so excited to read the rest because this is my favourite couple! (I think it is anyway - you might be evil yet). :D