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Overall, very well done. I'm new to the Bleach fandom and am still learning all the various characters and their personalities. That said, I think that you did a great job with everyone. The story was quite plausible and believable, your descriptions and dialogue very vivid and coherent. My only criticism: spelling and some minor grammar errors, both of which could be dealt with by more careful proof-reading or using a beta. I enjoyed this and read it all in one sitting -- a rare thing.

Its good you question yourself about how this came out and was it too early. I dont think so. You spend a great deal of time with both of the characters..about how they felt and what they went through to finally speak to eachother at the end and maybe start over..of course their relationship is probably going to change quite a lot, at least personally i bet. :P I think its a great chapter. I say it was a good time to end their argument and start with anohter lol. :P Keep going, your doing a great job! I didn't even like this pairing lol and its working for me. Hope u start the next part of this soon.

Hiye, this is soooo interesting. Now I guess it will only get more so as time passes.

Sorry about how late the review is coming lol!!! Um - well, i feel bad for rukia, i sympathise with her feelings because it must be hard to have two of the people closest to you keeping things from you, especially when you know it's something obviously serious. I was a bit relieved that Renji behaved though :) lool and the way you described him, the way he was dressed (had to end up taking what Byakuya had given him) he sounded like he looked amazing :D I liked the way you described the dinner and couldn't help but curl my lips at the nibles all giving renji funny looks lol, i'm glad Byakuya put them in their place ^_6. Can't wait for the next chapter ^_^ and as always great chapter!!!

Hina xXxx

Gosh, i hoped they will finally talk but no, it would be to easy ne? ;D
Nice chapter anyway ^__^ I'm waiting for another one :D

I just finished reading your fics all today and I liked the story so much! The tension and anticipation of both the reader and the characters in the story that build all at the same time is perfect! What a great balance. I can't wait to read ch14 of black and red!

*___* i can't wait for the next chapter.
Wow you made the story sound so real, your Bya and Ren are so complicated and manydimensional ( don't know if taht word even exist in english) I just couldn't stop reading. How long till they finally get together? :P

Shunsui was just great in that last chapter lool and Ukitake's reaction was great too ^_^. I felt really sorry for Rukia though, it'd be hell to get caught up in something like that and not even know what 'that' was, it's true that neither Byakuya nor Renji have attempted tog ive some sort of explanation and being kept in the dark about it would make it worse *sigh*... well it'll be interesting to see how exactly the clan meeting go's - hopefully, it won't go too bad :s - thanks for the update and sorry for the late review lol

Hina xXxx

Heh, well that conversation between the two didn't go so bad... I mean I think Byakuya did pretty well and Renji didn't blow up so that's a good thing lol, however, Renji's reasons for agreeing to go to the clan-meeting are making me a little antsy lol - he was too mischevious so things might not go that well at that meeting lol but hey :D I can't wait to read that ^_^ Thanks for the update, as always great characterization ^_6

Hina xXxx

Hmmm can I hit Byakuya? Can I?

The story is good as ever and gods I feel so sorry for Renji... He's got nowhere to go. His pride stops him from telling anyone or even resigning and asking for a transfer, but for him to stay with Byakuya... *sighs* Seriously, poor Renji :( *hugs him and his shoved away by a snarling Renji* *sighs*

Your story is so friggin adicting...