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July 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really really love this so far! Oh it's so interesting and kinda has a cute plot (If that's what it is) to it. I would love to see Zaraki paired with him! Or Ichi! You're really good at coming up with these original scenes and how it leads up! It isn't just typical stuffie, atleast I think so, I like that alot! And I love that Yumi got loving first! I like how you portrayed him too! He's one of my fav characters! Very very neat idea with the hair-tie! *nodnod* >w< I eagerly await more! *re-reads while drooling.*
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September 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Alright, dude. I am signed in for this..
One, put the proper warnings on this..
The story is totally in AU...
Nothing you have written matches the Bleach story line. Except for the part of Aizen.
Really, you need to put the AU warning and learn to spell the names correctly.
It's Tousen and Toushirou.
Now if you had the AU warning I could understand but dude..sorry to burst your bubble.
The 11th division will never be friends with the fourth.
Tousen would never be reinstated into the society. The Captain Commander would not just give him a slap on the wrist.
Komomaru would not forgive Tousen for his betrayal.
If your going to write a story..at least keep it somewhat in cannon. Stay true to at least part of the story.
You have basically written bleach how you want it to be and dude, that's so not cool. I could understand if it was nothing but a smut fest.... But your trying to write a plot in.
Good luck in your writing.. I couldn't get no further than the second chapter. Well once I got past your table of contents.
This isn't a flame, just some advice. Take it how you want to and trust me, if I was going to flame, I wouldn't have been as nice.
One, put the proper warnings on this..
The story is totally in AU...
Nothing you have written matches the Bleach story line. Except for the part of Aizen.
Really, you need to put the AU warning and learn to spell the names correctly.
It's Tousen and Toushirou.
Now if you had the AU warning I could understand but dude..sorry to burst your bubble.
The 11th division will never be friends with the fourth.
Tousen would never be reinstated into the society. The Captain Commander would not just give him a slap on the wrist.
Komomaru would not forgive Tousen for his betrayal.
If your going to write a story..at least keep it somewhat in cannon. Stay true to at least part of the story.
You have basically written bleach how you want it to be and dude, that's so not cool. I could understand if it was nothing but a smut fest.... But your trying to write a plot in.
Good luck in your writing.. I couldn't get no further than the second chapter. Well once I got past your table of contents.
This isn't a flame, just some advice. Take it how you want to and trust me, if I was going to flame, I wouldn't have been as nice.
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September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh please! tell me that you're not going to end this here??!! I have been waiting for the next update since you last updated and I check atleast once a day! so please, for a sanity of your reader, update soon... please?
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August 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
woot! you updated, I really hope that there will be some more soon.
I'd really like some N/C:ish or D/s:ish scene with ukitake and Zaraki (Zaraki beeing the dominant one ofcourse :D)
I'd really like some N/C:ish or D/s:ish scene with ukitake and Zaraki (Zaraki beeing the dominant one ofcourse :D)
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August 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*drool*
~ one hour later ~
*still drooling~
Wow!
*starts to read again*
By the way I found to small errors in your story. In one part you have written feel, but I am sure you ment fell. And the other one, heck! Where was it? Well anyway this were the only mistakes I found. Keep Going! Hope to read from you soon.
Oh yeah! Almost forgot. Ukitakes lover could be Kyoraku. The hat of the man wachting Ukitake would proof this. But this would be to easy. Is it also possible that Ichigo is Ukitakes lover? Well, I hope you let me soon find out. ^^
~ one hour later ~
*still drooling~
Wow!
*starts to read again*
By the way I found to small errors in your story. In one part you have written feel, but I am sure you ment fell. And the other one, heck! Where was it? Well anyway this were the only mistakes I found. Keep Going! Hope to read from you soon.
Oh yeah! Almost forgot. Ukitakes lover could be Kyoraku. The hat of the man wachting Ukitake would proof this. But this would be to easy. Is it also possible that Ichigo is Ukitakes lover? Well, I hope you let me soon find out. ^^
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August 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YEAH! I can't wait until I read this hot peace of a lemon! ^^ This chapter was again beyond words. I started drooling at the moment Ikkaku kissed Yumi. This was hot! And Yumi thinking it was Ukitake! YEAH! I can't get enough of it. It makes my heart beat in joy. I wonder what Ukitake will do with a lap full of horny Toushirou. Muahahahahaha!
*snigger*
Mh... another pairing... I'd also like to see Ichi x Ukitake and when you are on it then maybe hichi x ukitake. Keep going! Hope to read from you soon.
*snigger*
Mh... another pairing... I'd also like to see Ichi x Ukitake and when you are on it then maybe hichi x ukitake. Keep going! Hope to read from you soon.
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
your writing style is amazing. ^^ i love it. at the moment it seems there are quite a lot of airings. but i like it. i would love to see ukitake und hitsugaya in bed. I think they would make a nice couple. ^^ hope to read from you soon.
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
and also a review for chapter one. i loved my head of by the part where ikkaku was asked kindly to take the place of a taicho. XD it was great. please continue. I love your story.