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March 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
haha yea or get it tattooed on his ass xD
man this chapter was getting steamy keep up the awesome work!
man this chapter was getting steamy keep up the awesome work!
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March 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Muwahaha that was HOT!! hehe...like always...I WANT MORE!!
I love how you write both Gin and Hitsugaya! Are they going to get somewhere soon? Are the other captains looking for Hitsu-chan? Can you make me love your story any more? haha soo many questions!
Thank you again for the amazing chapter.
I love how you write both Gin and Hitsugaya! Are they going to get somewhere soon? Are the other captains looking for Hitsu-chan? Can you make me love your story any more? haha soo many questions!
Thank you again for the amazing chapter.
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March 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This is an amazing story! I love it mainly because unlike many Gin/Hitsu, and other yaoi stories, it actually has a plot...a good one at that. It doesn't just say: They saw each other, they said...."Hmm let's fuck.", they fucked and then the story is over.
I really appreciate you writing this story. God knows I could never do a better job. ^^
I'm really looking foward to the next chapter.
I really appreciate you writing this story. God knows I could never do a better job. ^^
I'm really looking foward to the next chapter.
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March 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yay! I love this story. I am so glad you updated! Can't wait for the next chapter. Personally I love Hitsugaya's hair...haha even tried to die my hair last year to cosplay as him but ended up having to be Mastumoto since my hair turned orangeish brown instead haha....sigh.
hoping to see the next chapter soon!!!!
hoping to see the next chapter soon!!!!
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March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really neat new chapter! I like the repetition of the "white" motif... Hitsugaya's feelings are well expressed. Also, I liked Nnoitra trying ince again to have fun with cute little Shiro... <3
The Gin-Hitsu-tension is awesome. Can't await the next chapter!
The Gin-Hitsu-tension is awesome. Can't await the next chapter!
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March 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This delay was caused by factors entirely out of my control - Midterm exams. Horrid things, those. Ah, but never you mind my ramblings! I have another delay in this review that actually directly caused me to actively make time. I read your review on my humble piece of fiction. Reading through that...I had a really big grin on my face, to the point where people were wondering if there was something wrong with me. It was so sincere that I'm going to have to redouble my efforts on the next, final chapter, but your review really, really raised the bar for me. Now I have a clue what you must feel like whenever you get reviews you find most enjoyable.
I think this chapter, the sixth in your tale, is my new favorite. Chapter four's role as my esteemed compatriot has just been usurped by the the chapter that tackled the dragon, if I might borrow the quote from the Looking For Group webcomic. I think of it in two parts - the desert and the main course, in that order. My reasoning for this, if you'll permit me some creative leeway with language mechanics, is backwards twofold. The main portion of your text, the confrontations between Nnoitra and Hitsugaya, and later Ichimaru, was the sugary treat in advance of the meal. Though disproportionate to one another, and I swear it'll all make sense soon, the resolution to the conflict, leaving Ichimaru and Hitsugaya in its aftermath, flips it on its head (in a good way, I assure you) and fills the stomach up in the way that only small portions of a grand meal can.
That's a very, very contrived way of saying I liked how you set up this chapter and I liked what each piece of the proverbial meal meant. I do apologize for the complexity of it - I have a knack for using a lot of vocabulary unnecessarily, a habit I think defines my style in a way. Not particularly in a hurry to solve it. That is to say, I'm not rushin' to fix it.
...Well, before I start off on another tangent, thanks again for your review, and I look forward to writing and reading more~
I think this chapter, the sixth in your tale, is my new favorite. Chapter four's role as my esteemed compatriot has just been usurped by the the chapter that tackled the dragon, if I might borrow the quote from the Looking For Group webcomic. I think of it in two parts - the desert and the main course, in that order. My reasoning for this, if you'll permit me some creative leeway with language mechanics, is backwards twofold. The main portion of your text, the confrontations between Nnoitra and Hitsugaya, and later Ichimaru, was the sugary treat in advance of the meal. Though disproportionate to one another, and I swear it'll all make sense soon, the resolution to the conflict, leaving Ichimaru and Hitsugaya in its aftermath, flips it on its head (in a good way, I assure you) and fills the stomach up in the way that only small portions of a grand meal can.
That's a very, very contrived way of saying I liked how you set up this chapter and I liked what each piece of the proverbial meal meant. I do apologize for the complexity of it - I have a knack for using a lot of vocabulary unnecessarily, a habit I think defines my style in a way. Not particularly in a hurry to solve it. That is to say, I'm not rushin' to fix it.
...Well, before I start off on another tangent, thanks again for your review, and I look forward to writing and reading more~
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March 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Mmmm, blood licking. Sorry, had to get that out of the way.
I missed reviewing chapter five. *bows head* Gomen. I check aff very rarely for updates because I've gotten so disappointed. But it is clear to say that I am still very, very much interested and intrigued by your fic! I love your characterization. Such a mix of innocence and determination. You have Hitsugaya's surly character and yet, you have captured that he is still very young (well, for a Shinigami anyways). I love it.
I also found it quite interesting that Hitsugaya had been thinking about how much he hated his hair and then, it was one of the comments that Nnoitra made. Very, very good bit there. I love how you depicted Nnoitra. Silly fifth espada, to actually think he can take down Ichimaru. *shakes head* But that is indeed his character. And Gin is knowing as always. I think Ichimaru is very aware of his value to Aizen, and it's far, far more than Nnoitra's value. The two are not even on the same scale. But I won't go on this tangent (even though I have already partially *grin*).
Still loving this story very much. I eagerly await what you have next to bring us.
~Dracoqueen22~
PS> Thanks for reviewing for me! I felt incredibly happy to see that you had!
I missed reviewing chapter five. *bows head* Gomen. I check aff very rarely for updates because I've gotten so disappointed. But it is clear to say that I am still very, very much interested and intrigued by your fic! I love your characterization. Such a mix of innocence and determination. You have Hitsugaya's surly character and yet, you have captured that he is still very young (well, for a Shinigami anyways). I love it.
I also found it quite interesting that Hitsugaya had been thinking about how much he hated his hair and then, it was one of the comments that Nnoitra made. Very, very good bit there. I love how you depicted Nnoitra. Silly fifth espada, to actually think he can take down Ichimaru. *shakes head* But that is indeed his character. And Gin is knowing as always. I think Ichimaru is very aware of his value to Aizen, and it's far, far more than Nnoitra's value. The two are not even on the same scale. But I won't go on this tangent (even though I have already partially *grin*).
Still loving this story very much. I eagerly await what you have next to bring us.
~Dracoqueen22~
PS> Thanks for reviewing for me! I felt incredibly happy to see that you had!
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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love it!!! This story is so awesome... please continue!!!
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
-places Till over her knee and spanks- Bad you for not having an account on msn. For shame. -smiles and then laughs- Loved the new one. Also..I love ya also..And as long as the closet has internet and food..I'm good. Oh and sex. Must have the sex. I'm a growing young woman after all and I have urges to forefill. Now go get an msn account! -commands as she gives 'the look'- Takes two seconds and then we can chat to our hearts content about Ichimaru and Hitsugaya. Think of the possibilties....As a gift to you...A small peice of yaoi..Involving our boys..
Hands crowded him. Tugged. Pulled. He fought avidly but in clear vain. He heard that giggle and knew who it was. Rage filled him and his struggling increased, wanting to get away from the hands of Ichimaru. "Ma..Ma..Ya movin' t'much.." came a almost lazy drawl that had Hitsugaya snarling. He lashed his feet out only to have his entire form suddenly pinned down with the larger man's weight.
"Get the hell off of me, Ichimaru!" he raged. He was tisked like a disobidient child.
"Such language from ya. No need t'be rude," he was repremanded lightly, causing a scowl to settle on his lips. "An' that look is not pretty on ya," Ichimaru added as his face came into view for Toushiro. The fox grin made his left eye twitch. Ichimaru's eyes opened a fraction and oceanic orbs glittered in glee. Before another word could be uttered from his lips, Toushiro found his mouth covered with a pair of demanding ones. He tried to break the kiss but Ichimaru would not have it. Toushiro bucked and whined in protest as his mouth was claimed by the older man. It was when Ichimaru ground against his crotch that had Toushiro gasping and the other took advantage of the situation and slid his tongue within the ice prince's mouth....
Just a little treat form me for all your hard work. And as for Ichimaru's eyes being blue in mine. In the manga his eyes are blue...And I like them that way..lol..Hope you enjoyed! Much love and kisses!
Hands crowded him. Tugged. Pulled. He fought avidly but in clear vain. He heard that giggle and knew who it was. Rage filled him and his struggling increased, wanting to get away from the hands of Ichimaru. "Ma..Ma..Ya movin' t'much.." came a almost lazy drawl that had Hitsugaya snarling. He lashed his feet out only to have his entire form suddenly pinned down with the larger man's weight.
"Get the hell off of me, Ichimaru!" he raged. He was tisked like a disobidient child.
"Such language from ya. No need t'be rude," he was repremanded lightly, causing a scowl to settle on his lips. "An' that look is not pretty on ya," Ichimaru added as his face came into view for Toushiro. The fox grin made his left eye twitch. Ichimaru's eyes opened a fraction and oceanic orbs glittered in glee. Before another word could be uttered from his lips, Toushiro found his mouth covered with a pair of demanding ones. He tried to break the kiss but Ichimaru would not have it. Toushiro bucked and whined in protest as his mouth was claimed by the older man. It was when Ichimaru ground against his crotch that had Toushiro gasping and the other took advantage of the situation and slid his tongue within the ice prince's mouth....
Just a little treat form me for all your hard work. And as for Ichimaru's eyes being blue in mine. In the manga his eyes are blue...And I like them that way..lol..Hope you enjoyed! Much love and kisses!
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*smiles* You are like so talented! Yup I do agree! and that's what makes your story all the more exciting! OMG! and I so thought that snowy-chan was going to get felt up on some more lol good thing Gin came just before it got anymore deeper or I do believe Gin wouldn't be smiling anymore lol
love Monica
love Monica