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June 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Its getting better all the time. I hope Renji doesn't modify her memory. They seem to get along very good. And I could honestly see him saying "I'm not a punk.", that was such a perfect thing for him to say.
Good luck with your schooling and I can't wait for the next update. I have added this story to my Recommended Reading.
Good luck with your schooling and I can't wait for the next update. I have added this story to my Recommended Reading.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this story and can't wait for an update ^_^
It's so well written too (which is always a bonus XD) For a first fanfic the standard is extraordinarily high. There is attention to atmosphere setting and (thank you god!) characterisation!!!!! Top of the class by a long stretch ;)
I'm already in love with your OC. She's a fantastic creation. Let's be honest here. the vast majority of OFC are Mary-sues or insane and stupid where the male characters inexplicably fall madly in love with her anyway. While this is fine when you feel like reading something like this it does not make for good writing. Congratulations on avoiding such pitfalls and creating an interesting and fully rounded individual
Please consider me an avid fan and supporter. ^_^ I look forward to your next update.
It's so well written too (which is always a bonus XD) For a first fanfic the standard is extraordinarily high. There is attention to atmosphere setting and (thank you god!) characterisation!!!!! Top of the class by a long stretch ;)
I'm already in love with your OC. She's a fantastic creation. Let's be honest here. the vast majority of OFC are Mary-sues or insane and stupid where the male characters inexplicably fall madly in love with her anyway. While this is fine when you feel like reading something like this it does not make for good writing. Congratulations on avoiding such pitfalls and creating an interesting and fully rounded individual
Please consider me an avid fan and supporter. ^_^ I look forward to your next update.
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This story is really great, and I would love to read more! Also, you're a great writer; it makes your story stand out a lot!
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a great start to a first fanfic. Your writing is well thought out and I am very pleased that you had choosen to answer my challenge. In the first two chapters you have captured my intrest and I will continue to read and watch this story.
I would love to say thank you for not having Renji injured when the girl met him. And I love the idea that you are writing both him and Byakuya looking for wives. I didn't say who passed the law in the Society but I find that using the nobles for Byakuya works.
Again thank you for writing and I will check back often for updates.
ShadowandFlamePanther..aka..Wolfie
I would love to say thank you for not having Renji injured when the girl met him. And I love the idea that you are writing both him and Byakuya looking for wives. I didn't say who passed the law in the Society but I find that using the nobles for Byakuya works.
Again thank you for writing and I will check back often for updates.
ShadowandFlamePanther..aka..Wolfie
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very good so far. I like the setting up of your characters.
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What a sweet story so far! I hope you update soon. You're writing is really well done to, impressive. :)
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June 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice. Try to upload on to fanfiction.net also.
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June 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice Start. I look forward to more.