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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG roflao Owowow oh god I'm in pain!! I don't know who to feel more bad for, I just can't decide!! Oh man, to see the look on the clerk's face when someone like Kenpachi comes asking for some help on condoms ^^ This is great. Man I wish I could think of a plot idea you can use, i really do!! Ken is like MY FAVORITE character in the whole series!! *blinks* Why am I going for the sadistic type lately? Anyway this is great and man I so wanna read more!!
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September 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm very much enjoying this particular fic. The pairing is cute, and I like how you made Ichigo uke, but he still has his aggressive personality. And your first attempt at a first person pov is very good. I love how you write Kenpachi. You do tend to revert back to third person pov sometimes, but that's very easy to do, and just as easy to fix. Over all, very nice.
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September 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Kenny...
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September 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Your first person is good for the most part.
I noticed the same thing that happens to me when I write FIrst person though,
and sometimes your pronouns slip into third person.
The story works as first person overall though.
And poor Kenpachi and all the trouble with condoms...
I noticed the same thing that happens to me when I write FIrst person though,
and sometimes your pronouns slip into third person.
The story works as first person overall though.
And poor Kenpachi and all the trouble with condoms...
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September 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really like the stories, and to say you've never done first person before you did really well. There are a few places where you revert back to your original writing style but that's easy to fix. The story flows well enough.
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September 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMFG!! I'm having the most hilarious pictures in my head with Kenpachi buying CONDOMS!
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August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
very nice, kudos and cookies!
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August 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I REALLY REALLY liked that one!! Keep em comin!
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August 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I swear to Kami that Kenpachi is either part wolf demon or vampire... with his blood fettish either would be hot *snicker* keep up the great writing gotta go change the drool buckets now we've filled them with both stories
Af and Rysh
Af and Rysh
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August 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That's it Kenny right to the point!