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for What She Needs

by Blckthorn

schedule January 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hey!
So far I'm loving the story. There are a few grammatical errors that are easy to change. A few words repeated. What I try to do when I use the same word to describe something in sentences next to one another, is to go to thesaurus.com and look up different words I can use.

Candice
schedule January 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hot damn woman!
I love the blossoming jealousy that's coming from him. There were a few issues with spelling and punctuation. Some of your sentences seemed to run-on, while others seemed to stop short of being complete. But, I gotta tell you, you're getting me hooked to this story. :)
schedule August 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
dayuum that was hottt!!!
person Polymer
schedule May 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I can't really think of anything this perfect story needs more of. It's packed with passionate sex, drama and a whole bunch of everything else. I loved how you focussed on the Soul Society and the pairings.

I will enjoy this for a long time to come. I can't stop reareading it!
schedule October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good ending to a rather unusual story. Finally Nanao and her captain find each other. Nice.
person Neko-chan
schedule October 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
thank you for writing a wonderful epilogue. Always welcome and I look forward to more of your work!
person Ladylara
schedule October 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was so cute. I am glad that you posted that.. it made everything perfect. I have truly enjoyed reading this story. I hope to see more from you in the future.
person Toast
schedule October 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I know that last chapter was your first attempt at humor but I found it very funny. Also i loved the entire story so congrats to you for finishing it and making each chapter well worth the read. I think you should give this genre another go, because you'll definitely have at least one reader. ;)
person deception-M
schedule October 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy to see new chapters!!!
lol you have no idea how excited i was to see there was not one, but TWO chapters for me to read!

loved the ending and i hope the epilogue will be great too.
person Ladylara
schedule October 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was an incredible chapter. It was so packed full of intensity that I had to read it in parts. but I loved it.