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January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Haha, I knew the Shinigami Women's Association wouldn't be able to resist spying on Soi Fong's date! I hope she and Gwydion will be able to finish it, though!
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January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh for the days when romance meant there could be dragons. Very good, although I wish you could start seeing the dark lining to silver clouds. But hey, I have a venomous personality. Keep up the good work. Yay for updating!
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January 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I loved the chapter! I knew the "date at home" idea would work out!
It's kinda a shame they didn't get to kiss at the end, but they'll get theirs eventually!
Yoruichi's reaction to Soi's sudden growth was perfect. I re-read that part of the chapter 3 times because I liked it so much!
Sorry for the short review, but I feel I can express my feelings toward the latest chapters in two words. Loved it.
I eagerly await the next chapter!
It's kinda a shame they didn't get to kiss at the end, but they'll get theirs eventually!
Yoruichi's reaction to Soi's sudden growth was perfect. I re-read that part of the chapter 3 times because I liked it so much!
Sorry for the short review, but I feel I can express my feelings toward the latest chapters in two words. Loved it.
I eagerly await the next chapter!
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January 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ah, the Women’s Association. How could I have forgotten? Perfect comic timing. Here I am, slightly bored, and suddenly they appear like water in the desert, wisecracking and committing acts of borderline stalkery. Only, I miss the presence of Chairwomen Kusajishi herself...
...So, Momo and Kira, eh? Eh? Say no more. Nod's as good as a wink to a blind bat, eh? Eh?
Praise. Hurrah! The plot makes its triumphant return to the forefront (though I commend its continued presence in the background), and the romance has finally progressed beyond the initial, awkward, reconnection/reconnaissance stages. I like their relationship. Lonely people finding solace and healing in one another has fascinated me since Rear Window.
In addition, significant character development has taken place. Both feel more comfortable, with themselves and one another, though I find that it was conveyed best via gesture (no eye patch or prosthetic, new clothes and smiles) rather than extended internal monologue. I do not exaggerate when I say it *was* very sweet to read, and seeing both of them *happy* knotted my stomach up. (In a good way, which has nothing to do with the indigestion I have suffered from overconsumption of bacon.)
Criticism. Onyx? Freakin' *onyx*? So many great words for dark (ebon, tenebral, sable, and raven off the top of my head (Last one's kinda cliched(Did I just put parenthesis *inside parenthesis*... inside parenthesis now that I think about it))), and you use onyx twice in the same section. This reaction may seem a tad excessive, and to be honest it probably is, but onyx is just outside my comfort zones as far as adjective obscurity is concerned. Please, don't turn such a readable story into a veritable flood of enigmatical, garrulous verbosity.
...That was probably an unfairly vicious (and hypocritical, given its length) reaction, especially over two words, though having spent a few minutes typing it, I'll leave it up.
...I just don't like the word onyx, okay?
Anyway, the build-up to the date dragged a little for me, though, being male, I know not what others shall think. Besides, it served its purpose in showcasing both characters' ineptitude in the matters romantical. (Is that a word?) I could argue that it has already been established, but this *is* a serial, so everything bears a little repeating.
I found the date itself well-done, and thought its simplicity well befit both characters. Soi's changing body was expected, though I am grateful to find she has skipped the acne.
Finally, and to summarize, despite the middle few paragraphs I *did* enjoyed the meat of the chapter very much, and I sincerely beg your pardon if I have offended. I won't take anything back (review=criticize as well as praise), but I also will do my best to be constructive in my criticism... all of which makes the onyx rant look even worse.
On a side note, and I hope I'm not drawing the wrong conclusion here, but I am flattered, just *flattered* beyond words, that you would name the chapter after one of my comments. My fire to improve their quality burns nearly as bright as my determination to write more of my story here. Thank you, thank you so much...
Unless... You came up with it on your own... In which case, I cannot apologize enough for being an arrogant jerk. Please, forgive me...
...So, Momo and Kira, eh? Eh? Say no more. Nod's as good as a wink to a blind bat, eh? Eh?
Praise. Hurrah! The plot makes its triumphant return to the forefront (though I commend its continued presence in the background), and the romance has finally progressed beyond the initial, awkward, reconnection/reconnaissance stages. I like their relationship. Lonely people finding solace and healing in one another has fascinated me since Rear Window.
In addition, significant character development has taken place. Both feel more comfortable, with themselves and one another, though I find that it was conveyed best via gesture (no eye patch or prosthetic, new clothes and smiles) rather than extended internal monologue. I do not exaggerate when I say it *was* very sweet to read, and seeing both of them *happy* knotted my stomach up. (In a good way, which has nothing to do with the indigestion I have suffered from overconsumption of bacon.)
Criticism. Onyx? Freakin' *onyx*? So many great words for dark (ebon, tenebral, sable, and raven off the top of my head (Last one's kinda cliched(Did I just put parenthesis *inside parenthesis*... inside parenthesis now that I think about it))), and you use onyx twice in the same section. This reaction may seem a tad excessive, and to be honest it probably is, but onyx is just outside my comfort zones as far as adjective obscurity is concerned. Please, don't turn such a readable story into a veritable flood of enigmatical, garrulous verbosity.
...That was probably an unfairly vicious (and hypocritical, given its length) reaction, especially over two words, though having spent a few minutes typing it, I'll leave it up.
...I just don't like the word onyx, okay?
Anyway, the build-up to the date dragged a little for me, though, being male, I know not what others shall think. Besides, it served its purpose in showcasing both characters' ineptitude in the matters romantical. (Is that a word?) I could argue that it has already been established, but this *is* a serial, so everything bears a little repeating.
I found the date itself well-done, and thought its simplicity well befit both characters. Soi's changing body was expected, though I am grateful to find she has skipped the acne.
Finally, and to summarize, despite the middle few paragraphs I *did* enjoyed the meat of the chapter very much, and I sincerely beg your pardon if I have offended. I won't take anything back (review=criticize as well as praise), but I also will do my best to be constructive in my criticism... all of which makes the onyx rant look even worse.
On a side note, and I hope I'm not drawing the wrong conclusion here, but I am flattered, just *flattered* beyond words, that you would name the chapter after one of my comments. My fire to improve their quality burns nearly as bright as my determination to write more of my story here. Thank you, thank you so much...
Unless... You came up with it on your own... In which case, I cannot apologize enough for being an arrogant jerk. Please, forgive me...
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January 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Not a lot to say about chapter seven. Things played out more or less as anticipated, though I greatly desire to know why all characters across all fiction seem to enjoy being punched in the face so much.
Villains: Eh, I was hoping for more of them, but just three will certainly work if they are properly pulled off. Knock 'em dead.
...You know, I didn't realize the horrible pun implicit in that last sentence until this had been up for a while.
Villains: Eh, I was hoping for more of them, but just three will certainly work if they are properly pulled off. Knock 'em dead.
...You know, I didn't realize the horrible pun implicit in that last sentence until this had been up for a while.
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January 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Finally updated! Great new chapter, as always. Hope this trend will last!
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January 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sigh. Gwydion, Gwydion...
So long on Earth, *Japan* even, you've practically gone native, and yet you *still* haven't read any shojo manga? I realize it takes inches off your manhood, but none can resist the curiosity, just once.
Glad to see the plot's hopping along. Succubus lady: inevitable, but inevitable for a reason. I just hope Gwydion's angst(German pronunciation) doesn't morph into angst(phonetic pronunciation), leading to his abandonment of Soul Society to join the invading Horde, establishment as evil general, and ultimate redemption at Soi's hands.
Just shooting a plot rat before it infects the wholesome plot beef, you understand. Good luck, and sorry for the late review.
So long on Earth, *Japan* even, you've practically gone native, and yet you *still* haven't read any shojo manga? I realize it takes inches off your manhood, but none can resist the curiosity, just once.
Glad to see the plot's hopping along. Succubus lady: inevitable, but inevitable for a reason. I just hope Gwydion's angst(German pronunciation) doesn't morph into angst(phonetic pronunciation), leading to his abandonment of Soul Society to join the invading Horde, establishment as evil general, and ultimate redemption at Soi's hands.
Just shooting a plot rat before it infects the wholesome plot beef, you understand. Good luck, and sorry for the late review.
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January 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awww. Confused and hormonal Soi Fong is just too cute. I really enjoyed her interaction with Kin and Yoruichi - the dynamic they have is just too fun. Yoruichi tearing up like a proud mommy was hysterical and touching at the same time, I really liked it. That being said, the interaction with Ichigo and Gwydion was priceless as well. Sometimes I envy men for being able to punch each other out and be buddies afterwards! But maybe Soi Fong is being a little too mushy? I know she's in love, and heaven knows that can bring the mushiness out in all of us, but I would think that she'd still be a little bit wary, especially since her feelings are so strong, do you know what I mean? But that's just me.
Creepy villains! I'm rather scared! Great chapter. :D
Creepy villains! I'm rather scared! Great chapter. :D
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December 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the update it was good. I am enjoying this sequel in your bleach universe alot. SoiFon is one of the few women in Bleach that don't annoy me to death. Keep up the good work and i'm looking forward to the next chapter. Happy Holidays~
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December 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
She ran? SHE RAN!!!! Oh! I can't wait to see the reason she ran. It better be good. Really good, cause it was really silly to run. But you know what's best. I kinda know I'm not gonna like 'Cat Chick' at all. (Cat chick is unnamed clingy chick, fyi.)But this chapter was nice, it made me giggle, which is always cool. Can't wait for the update!!!