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for Because he is just a child

by FaithVandom

person whirleeq
schedule June 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
HitsuMatsuGin triangles are *the best*

I totally think you should continue this a few years down the line
person zamudiom
schedule March 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this is such a cute little story, a sort of poem. its really deep and full of emotion. good job
person tylendel
schedule February 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I don't think you should stop. Your grammar isn't perfect, and I think you'd really benefit from a beta, but your style works if you're careful about not being too angsty ^^

I also don't generally like this pairing, but I think you've got the potential to write a beautiful story here. It'll be interesting to see the characters go through the changes - and, in Matsumoto's case, how she'll change her view of Hitsugaya - so I really hope you decide to continue. Don't get discouraged just because English isn't your first language either! It isn't mine, but I still love writing in English. So don't let something as silly as a language barrier keep you from sharing what might be a great story with the rest of us. I'll look for your next update. Good luck! ^^