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Wow this is really fucked up.... I know that your not done writing this and I do hope you finish it but, I let wondering, Byakuya had no one to trust? And what happened to his enormous spiritual pressure? Did the seal his power?

Ugh so many questions and only reading farther will answer them.

So my observations from reading this story is I tended to get a little lost as to what was going on. Alot is left to the imagination as how how the place currently looks. The OC's are developed well enough. Lil foggy bout some stuff. I like that now I have some bg on Makoto and Hayata, so what's Chou's angle and could the tension between Makoto and Chou be more defined?

This is a very interesting read. I really hope you finish it!

This story is so sad. I want Byakuya to fight for his freedom. He doesn't deserve to be a whore. Please don't let that evil man touch him.

(7) Makoto is proving to be a rather frightening character, I can't think of many people that could not only bind Byakuya but hold on to him as well. It seems to me Byakuya is in for a rather nasty time of things. I'm a little worried about the next chapter even if I'm also looking forward to reading more.

It took me a little while to respond because I went back and reread all the previous chapters but I am still reading and looking forward to more updates, I just wanted to make sure you knew that I still enjoy reading your story even after all this time :)

(6) Why am I not surprised that Hayato has gotten himself right into the middle of all this. And does he know he was sold, actually I was wondering if that meant he was actually taken away by the guy who bought him or does he stay and it just means that he gets him exclusively? You know it was such a tease giving us just this little chapter, I'm really looking forward to the next update :) I'm hoping it'll start to clear up some things, like whether Byakuya is even there or not. I can't help but think that right now Makoto is probably wishing that he had made Byakuya an offer even if he would have resented him it would have been better than this, can't wait to see what happens ^_^

I'm still in suspense O.O rofl how could you do that lol

(5) It's always so hard with original characters to make people actually care about them but you seem to have succeeded with Makoto. You see how much he's struggling and how unhappy he is that you can't help but feel for him. Honestly if there wasn't the threat of Byakuya ending up having to work in the club I would have liked to have seen what would have developed between him and Makoto. It's funny but with Makoto you know that he's the boss and yet it feels like I either want to save him or at least make his life a little better in some way. He wants something that's just his and who could blame him but I think my favourite part was when Makoto explained to Chou his reasons for not wanting to make the offer I loved how aware and realistic he was, of course he would be considering his situation. Chou's reaction was a little surprising though, it makes me curious to know more about their situation, I wish we had gotten to hear more from them when Makoto apologized.
Great chapter so much happened, I was almost certain that Byakuya was gone but now you've managed to plant just enough doubt to make me wonder. Can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens :)

Why do I get the feeling that Chou whispered that binding spell o.O or maybe he has rogue shinigami assistance.
Or maybe Renji or Ichi found Bya-kun and saved him ^_^ that would make me really happy ^_^

(4) It's been awhile since I've seen this story it was good to see an update to remind me of it :) Nice twist I didn't see that coming but I'm glad that he got out or at least is trying to get free, we'll have to wait for the next chapter to actually see who's there (evil cliffhanger) On the other hand I feel sorry for Makoto he seems lonely, it's like he needs someone for himself who isn't trying to control him or get something from him, I liked that look back at his past it was an interesting insight to the situation.
I can't wait for the next update to see who Byakuya ended up running into and also if this really is the last we'll see of Makoto, it's a great set up for the next chapter ^_^

It's been such a long time *glomp* I missed this ^_^ I hope it's not that long for the other update :/ It's nice that Ma-chan gave Bya-kun the chance to escape ^_^

I'm so glad you had time to update this!
I really enjoyed the first part about Makoto's past; it was skillfully written and drew me in immediately.
And then Byakuya making his escape--and getting caught by the Shinigami! Amazing! I so can't wait to see what happens next.