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November 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
A great begining. The struggle for power was quite amusing and made it worth reading. Ive never been a fan of yuri but you made it worth while anyway. The second half of the fanfic, right after Sun-Sun wins their little competition, it went down hill. That should be chopped off and used for another chapter. It was to rushed and made no sense. I hope to see this continued and fleshed out.
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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good, and a little silly but I like silly. Can't wait to read the next chapter, though I would have loved to see Sun-Sun's tail fuck Halibel more. That would have been highly erotic indeed. Ja Ne