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September 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Much better, far easier to read this way, thank you very much.
Very hot, I have to admit I am a fan of big manly man smex. I don't write it, but that doesn't mean I can't enjoy it. I'm a red blooded woman, after all.
Very hot, I have to admit I am a fan of big manly man smex. I don't write it, but that doesn't mean I can't enjoy it. I'm a red blooded woman, after all.
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September 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That sould happen in the show but I think Yumichika would feel left out and join too which I would be cool with... umm this story was awsome I mean OOC for both of them but sooo good cause I love Ikkaku soo much but um you spelled Yumichika's name worng o.O
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September 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
A sentence is not a paragraph. Don't put breaks in between EVERY sentence, it makes it hard to read and makes the flow kind of dick, jane and spot. Group sentences in the same subject together.
I'll read this fully when it's been rendered readable. Right now I can't make it more than a handful of lines in before getting distracted.
I'll read this fully when it's been rendered readable. Right now I can't make it more than a handful of lines in before getting distracted.