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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'll be sure to review just as much on part 2, you can be sure of that. But, as a note, it's 'Ukitake'. Just in case you use him in the next part or you want to fix any of those in this one. But anyways, can't wait for more of your works. ^_^
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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
YAY! Oh that was an awesome happy ending! Ohh Grimmy and Ichi are so cute, love it! See you in the next one :D
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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aww dude, not to the beautiful magnificent specimen called Rangiku. Anybody but her? I got to give it to Byakuya though and Rukia. They boy never gave up without a fight (though Rukia got off easy). Damn makes me just want to jump in the fray and kill that bastard Barragan for his stupid strength. For a god, he sure is stupid. I'll keep reading this though I would have thought that since he wanted to make a combination of Vizard and Arrancar (or whatever) why not get the Vizard that were in the battle and have them commit intercourse with the Arrancar. I just hope Matsumoto doesn't have to suffer anymore, poor girl.
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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Damn, you did it again. That was so cruel allowing them to see each other again. But seriously, even after the battle you would think Yamamoto would start looking at things with a different perspective. Guess you really can't teach old dogs new tricks. Getting crazier and crazier.
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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, once again you blew my mind. Seriously, I would have thought it was Rukia who had gotten pregnant not Unohana. I also found it highly strange how Matsumoto became immediately happy just over something as simple as marriage despite her current position. Still pretty good, glad you didn't demine Grimmjow's character though it's pretty easy not to as he's practically borderline crazy.
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It's "handsome" not "hansom". Don't know if there is more, because I did skip parts. Actually, most of the chapter.
To be frank, I'm severely disappointed. You may think it won't affect Ichigo and Rukia's relationship, but it does. It also has nothing to do with his character not being one to hold onto grudges. This is totally different from a grudge.
It is an act of betrayal, plain and simple. Not just a physical one, but an emotional one as well. With Ichigo's character, you don't think this would hurt him tremendouly since he couldn't get there in time, or that Rukia didn't have enough faith in him to wait for him to rescue her, or that she couldn't think of some other solution. Look how the death of his mother affected Ichigo even years later. This is not something I think he can understand completely without feeling bitter or, in some way, inadequate of his strength. He has reacted like that whenever he cannot keep his promises and meet the expectations of himself. If Ichigo gets over it quickly, then you're selling him short.
And I'm angry, because from the first little twist you had of G and R (I can't even write them together), I hoped this would be the only pairing that wasn't a "pairing". You could have kept up with the twists you had going with these two from the beginning. It now feels like every other cheating story. I would have preferred no Ichigo/Rukia at all in this story, then I would have accepted her with the other one. So, disappointing.
I couldn't even enjoy Stark and Unohana, because I was too dissatisfied. And I still find it hard to believe it would take the rescue party over three years (or more) to get to them. I mean Rukia's rescue and Orihime's took like a month for them to train and organize. Sorry if that comes out mean, but I am truly irritated.
I don't know if I'm going to bother reading the last chapter, since I've been so let down now. Thought there would have been a little light in the dark "world" they found themselves in. What a bummer.
To be frank, I'm severely disappointed. You may think it won't affect Ichigo and Rukia's relationship, but it does. It also has nothing to do with his character not being one to hold onto grudges. This is totally different from a grudge.
It is an act of betrayal, plain and simple. Not just a physical one, but an emotional one as well. With Ichigo's character, you don't think this would hurt him tremendouly since he couldn't get there in time, or that Rukia didn't have enough faith in him to wait for him to rescue her, or that she couldn't think of some other solution. Look how the death of his mother affected Ichigo even years later. This is not something I think he can understand completely without feeling bitter or, in some way, inadequate of his strength. He has reacted like that whenever he cannot keep his promises and meet the expectations of himself. If Ichigo gets over it quickly, then you're selling him short.
And I'm angry, because from the first little twist you had of G and R (I can't even write them together), I hoped this would be the only pairing that wasn't a "pairing". You could have kept up with the twists you had going with these two from the beginning. It now feels like every other cheating story. I would have preferred no Ichigo/Rukia at all in this story, then I would have accepted her with the other one. So, disappointing.
I couldn't even enjoy Stark and Unohana, because I was too dissatisfied. And I still find it hard to believe it would take the rescue party over three years (or more) to get to them. I mean Rukia's rescue and Orihime's took like a month for them to train and organize. Sorry if that comes out mean, but I am truly irritated.
I don't know if I'm going to bother reading the last chapter, since I've been so let down now. Thought there would have been a little light in the dark "world" they found themselves in. What a bummer.
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, i was hopefull that this wouldn't happen. Rukia getting knocked up can, diffent to your opinion (sorry to say it so bluntly) only lead to heartbreak and chaos. Yes Ichigo may be a character that doesn't hold grudges but he will probablly blame himself for not being able to rescue Rukia sooner. You only have to look how much Ichigo pained and blamed himself for his mothers death, something where he absolutly had no way to help her. Furthermore will the relationship between Kinomi and Grimmjow only make it harder for him.
And by the way....how do you plan to solve the dilemma of Rukia being the mother of two children of different fathers? At first the children won't understand what it means that they have the same mother but differnt fathers....but as soon as they are old enough....Do you really think they would understand the situation Rukia was in? Probably not.
That Unohana has now finally acted on her growing feelings for Starrk is sweet, but what will happen to them onces Ichigo and friends are there? I can't imagine Yamamoto to permit a relationship between a Shinigami and an Arrancar.
So finally i have to say is: Please don't see this as an attack on your story. My only reason to write this is to make you aware that you maybe oversaw some details in your fantastic story.
And by the way....how do you plan to solve the dilemma of Rukia being the mother of two children of different fathers? At first the children won't understand what it means that they have the same mother but differnt fathers....but as soon as they are old enough....Do you really think they would understand the situation Rukia was in? Probably not.
That Unohana has now finally acted on her growing feelings for Starrk is sweet, but what will happen to them onces Ichigo and friends are there? I can't imagine Yamamoto to permit a relationship between a Shinigami and an Arrancar.
So finally i have to say is: Please don't see this as an attack on your story. My only reason to write this is to make you aware that you maybe oversaw some details in your fantastic story.
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely done intimacy Nova. To answer your query, no I didn't find them repetitive. It can be hard to achieve when you have a number of love scenes, so well done. I think the Rukia/Grimmjow thing was bound to happen. Seriously, any mother would find it hard to resist feelings toward a man who protected her, and loved her child like his own.I think Ichigo would be pissed at himself but would be too grateful to Grimmjow to be angry, he'd be a jerk not to be! As far as his feelings toward Rukia, I think he would, again, blame himself and spend the rest of "thier" lives making it up to her. :D
On the subject of SS accepting the relationships, (should they wish to come back) it is a very real possibility; Yama has chosen to over-look Ichigo's powers and accepted Chad,Ishida and Orihime. He would be a fool to turn away friendship with such powerful new allies!
Had to throw my two cents in. It bugs me when people scrutinize stories to the ridiculous stage. I hate OOCness as much as the next person, but seriously, can't ya just relax and enjoy a well written story, geez.
On the subject of SS accepting the relationships, (should they wish to come back) it is a very real possibility; Yama has chosen to over-look Ichigo's powers and accepted Chad,Ishida and Orihime. He would be a fool to turn away friendship with such powerful new allies!
Had to throw my two cents in. It bugs me when people scrutinize stories to the ridiculous stage. I hate OOCness as much as the next person, but seriously, can't ya just relax and enjoy a well written story, geez.
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Personally I enjoy this story. In regard to the interaction between Rukia and Grimmjow, I think it may hurt Ichigo but he will understand it was only done to protect Rukia since the rescue was so long in coming and Aisen was a serious threat to her safety and well-being. Perhaps the two males will find common ground via Rukia and the kids.
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
as mcuh as i lve this story (which by the way is a very interesting twist of stockhome syndrome and Bleach many kudos for that) is thee going to ba a rescue attempt int he part two or whatever?? i think this woudl be neet to have some more action thrown into it other then sex and feelings and raltionships (again i do REALLY liek his sotry) but i wanna see what Ichigo woudl do when he finds out he has a duaghter and that Grimmjow has been raising her and she sleeps with a zanpakto lol