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awwe I was soo happy that you thought of something so cool for Kenpachi's sword xD Cant wait for the awesome IchigoXShirosaki smuuttyness!!

trust Urahara to try and get in close while the option presents itself. Can't wait to see their reunion.

Ok, first I did not mean to be insulting. (and no You're not dreaming I'm still reading this story) I know a review is only MY personal opinion which may not be share by anyone else but me.

What I meant by vulgar PWP was 'common' PWP. I don't really know if you can actually use the word like that in English but I though that maybe since your nickname was French you could understand it the way I wanted. Calling PWP vulgar when I'm reading fic on AFF who has a lot of PWP in every sections, would be, for the least, Hypocritical.
what I meant by vulgar PWP is that I did not want to read your story just looking forward to sex scenes between Ichigo and whoever.

As for your OOC of Jirotoshi, it's more a question of what you wrote before: You said that Jirotoshi was affected by feelings he felt in his previous life, I would have thought that his possessiveness/protectivness would have overwhelm his pride... Or that he would have at least sealed his door so Ichigo would go wandering around since Ichigo already prooved him that he is not 'aware' of the danger.

Anyway, I'm quite surprise: why Isshin did not try to stop Jirotoshi to talk to him? Apparently, Jirotoshi had no recollection of Karkura so he doesn't know where Urahara's shop is, no? And if he has felt Ichigo's friends Reiatsu why did he not immediately go there? why bother asking his father? (Those Are questions not critics, I'm curious)

Thanks for answering my review! I think my e-mail is accessible here, if you want to contact me about what I wrote in this review of my previous review.

Once again sorry if I offended you.

Hope to read more of this story soon.

Oh, poor Isshin. He just can't see their eventual relationship through the eyes of us fansgirls/boys. I hope he'll be ok.

Nice job! On to the SHMUT!!!

Haha! Perfect way to set up sexy smut...Jiro is all angry and frustrated, and Ichigo is pissed, so angry!sex! Hurrah! Haha...I can only imagine what Jirotoshi's going to do with Ichigo when he gets his hands on him...

Poor Grimmy, always being kicked around... Thanks! I cannot wait for more!

Hi,

Ok, I like the plot of this story and all I even put it on my alert list on ff.net before even reading it.

Unfortunately, there are severals plot holes and mistakes which makes the story less smooth than it could be and also less enjoyable to read. Information given last minute to justify Kenpachi's lust for example; leaving too many choise to evement that should or not happen in the story in the hands of readers -If you had a Starrk/Grimm in mind or a even-if-only-one-sided Ken/Ichi you should have gone ahead and maybe asked readers if should be a very important theme or just a passing mension-, all this led to a severely unbalanced story! It's a wonder it did not crash down into a vulgar Porn Without Plot yet! And God would it be sad if it became a PWP.

Even so far as the prologue which is very short. Honestly, you could have done way better: You could have done a Jirotoshi POV and having him flashing his life in front of his life from the moment of his death to his birth (which would have been confusing and would have explained Jirotoshi's rage...) Then you could have go back with Ichigo... There were a thousand possibilities which would have made this prologue less awkward and more entising for readers.

Furthermore you went too quickly into the action, my opinion is that there should have been in your first chapter that 'confession' part with Kenpachi just before you launch into Orihime's kidnapping.

Now your Jirotoshi's characterization is giving me griefs too. You've describing him as fiercely protective of Ichigo and overwhelming possessive but he would leave him ALONE in Las Noche not once but TWICE, asking Espada he obviously can't trust to do his job????? O.O THE HELL!!

Moreover your Ichigo, you describe him as highly dependant on his brother when he was younger and overly attached to him. And he would just abandon his just found back twin to fight for his friends... Ichigo is more of a FAMILY first kind of guy, even more with his lost twin who just happen to barely remember him!!!

Anyway, even if the story is not what I expected it to be and I'm a bit disapointed by the quality of it, I nonetheless really enjoy reading it (as bizarre as it seems) I really love the pairing...

I hope I'll read more soon.

Thanks for writing this plot. ^^

I say B or D >:3
Awesome story BTW I can't wait to read more

I think Kenpachi should vie for Ichigo, and maybe there's a little between them, but I really do not think they should have sex. I think Jiro would see that as betrayal and he'd react very poorly to that (dead Ichigo badly).

Poor Grimmy! Everyone's so mean to him and he is so very hot! Thanks, cannot wait for more!

I'm voting A, because even though I LOVE KenxIchi, it doesn't feel quite right for this particular story.

id say either c or d