rate_review Reviews

Hey! Long time no read or type! I haven't checked the Bleach section in a while cus not much has come out recently that was worth reading. I'm glad you left that note in my review section for my own story or I might not have known you were continuing with this. YAY, you deleted that evil chappy!!! Lol. I decided to reread the whole thing and am SO excited! Now, I remember why I used to be so psyched about Hide&Seek!
However, I don't really buy the whole trauma-makes-you-lose-your-mind thing with Toshiro. I mean, I can understand being totally pissed at Central 46, since they consistently give out punishments not fit for the crimes and appear to be Class A Douche-Bags (that's one of my fav words now, lol), but I just can't see him actually believing Aizen and Gin. I think it would have been more believable to have Toshiro appear to be a puppet but know that Aizen's up to something and have a plan to screw up whatever Aizen seems to be plotting. He just is too honorable a character and has too much moral integrity to lose it when it counts the most and when everyone needs him to be strong. That's just my opinion, though, lol.
That being said, I'm still really into the story. The whole temporarily-insane-Toshiro aside, I'm uber-excited to see how you take the story and am going crazy looking for updates. I'm still really curious about how Toshiro/Rangiku can summon their zampakutos w/o handling them. Oh, a couple chps ago, before Toshiro left w/ Gin... Byakuya attacked the headcaptain, that's supposed to be Aizen, but nothing was ever mentioned about it again... That was odd, lol.
Thanks for leaving a review on my own story! Good job and peace out!

Wow, you updated quickly, lol! I put in my review and all of a sudden new chapters were up. How accommodating of you! Lol. *blushes* I feel so special! Thanks for getting inspired to delete that chp and restart the story again! That previous (now non-existent) chp 16 (?) had me wailing at the computer, screaming "NoOoOoOoOo!" I'm so excited you did this! I'm also kinda sad to see the story end, lol.
What a crazy ending! Yay, death to Aizen (sorry to ppl who read this review before the ending, lol)! I love how everyone pulled together and stomped his ass in the ground. I also loved your epilogue with all the kids and the happy family closure. I just love this story. Now we need to see about getting all the lit. errors out of it, lol *winks*. If you need any help, just let me know :-) I'm going to restart Emerald Sun too. I look forward to seeing more from you!

**Oh! Just as a side note: you might want to check the Author's Note at the end of chp 25. I know from experience that AFF will hide a story (maybe just the chp) if the a/n is over 600 words. I didn't count it myself, but I wanted to give you a heads up. Take care!

I'm around chapter six now (at least until the internet boots me off) and so far I like it (even the Noitora bit. My eyes bled for a moment there and I even can't stand the guy!) Then Grimmy-kitty's 'secret' I LMAO at that. (He's just so manly its a shock! HAHAHA). I also like how Hitsu is starting to remenisce (did I spell it right?) about Rangiku's actions during her time as his lieutenant. =)

I'm sorry, I don't buy this at all. Toshiro knows Gin and Aizen brutally raped Rangiku. Why would he ever follow them, join forces with them, even to "get stronger?" Either he's completely brainwashed, or this makes no sense.

I am so, so glad you got rid of that horrible depressing ending that made me cry! Looking forward to more...sure hope it ends better next time!

Heh. Keyboard sex. Actually, I didn't read the chapter title until I got to the bottom of the page, but I thought of Lady Gaga. There's a song on the same album as 'Bad Romance' that basically says what she was telling Nnoitra. It's called 'Teeth' and it's all "show me your teeth. I wanna see your mean. Open your mouth, boy. The truth is sexy." Heh. Food for thought.

Chp 15: OMG! Please, please, PLEASE don't let this be the end! Let this be an angsty dream or something! I've been waiting for weeks to see a fantASStic, thrilling next chapter. I'm begging, as a reader, to not let this awesome story end in tragedy! I woke up this morning thinking about Hide & Seek (AGAIN) and it just can't end like this! Bring the Central 46 down! They're a bunch of idiots anyways, lol. Seriously though, I will be severely disappointed if it ends like this. Yeah... can't even begin to describe how much so...

Good Chapter, RESCUE TOUSHIRO!

Good job, more soon!

Although, the previous reviewer makes a good point; your story has a bunch of spelling/grammar/punctuation errors, the transitions need some work, and at some points it is a bit choppy..... YOU ROCK!!! It feels like a crazy Bleach movie, only with sex *stands up and yells "WOO-HOOO!"* I couldn't stop reading until I was at the end of your posting. Now I have to wait until you make another chapter!? How dare you eat/work/sleep/getofftoyourownstory instead of finishing this story for my entertainment pleasure!?!? LOL. I love how many characters are in this story and how many relationships are involved and explored. I love how you've developed Toushiro's character and are making him more of an adult(YAY! he's sexy AND getting taller!). I can't wait to see what happens since both Toushiro and Rangiku's zampaktous can be released without them being held! I loved how everyone got along at Ichigo's house. I love what you've done with Grimmjow in all of his sexy kitty-cuteness and his relationship with Ulquiorra. And Ichigo, your sexy Eros, YAY lol!
I do have a suggestion though. I kept getting confused with some of the technicalities of the story, but I don't know if it's because I've watched/read so much the Bleach series/manga that I confused myself. For instance, where is Ichigo's family? Is this sometime in the future, when he doesn't live with them anymore? What about Orihime? She was only mentioned once as a threat to Ulquiorra, but never mentioned again? Is she still in Hueco Mundo (that was a biggie, left me wondering what the heck was going on...)?
I wish I could be in your story! LOL, I would do so many naughty things to SOOO many characters *sighs dreamily*, lol. Oh, I went back and looked at your summary. It's not sucky, it's actually good and is a great little teaser! You might want to mention rape in your list of warnings. Some people, as I'm sure you're aware, do NOT like even the idea of it. Most of your literary errors are probably due to typing as fast as you were thinking, and not having an editor. I know this story is your baby, so I hope you take this as positive constructive criticism. You should check out the forum and get a beta to edit this story. I'm part of the AFF forum, if for some reason you want to contact me, my user name is Evility.