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August 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I thought you did a great job with this chapter. The only part I felt that was 'unbelievable' was when Tia got stabbed in the chest and was okay enough to get up and run out the door to take Nel. She must be superwoman, lol. Otherwise, I liked the way you handled it.
I thought it was hilarious that they were getting arrested until I realized that they actually went to jail, lol. How could you be so mean to Grimmy!? I guess my naive mind thought they'd get off with self defense or something, lol.
I must admit, though, that I didn't like how Grim's vocab changed. I could have sworn he talked like a normal person until 10? I read it again to make sure, but I dunno, maybe it's me. Still, he got arrested?? I was hoping for a lovey reunion after everyone's healed and let's have crazy awesome sex scene. So, boo on that. LOL, still I enjoyed your story.
I thought it was hilarious that they were getting arrested until I realized that they actually went to jail, lol. How could you be so mean to Grimmy!? I guess my naive mind thought they'd get off with self defense or something, lol.
I must admit, though, that I didn't like how Grim's vocab changed. I could have sworn he talked like a normal person until 10? I read it again to make sure, but I dunno, maybe it's me. Still, he got arrested?? I was hoping for a lovey reunion after everyone's healed and let's have crazy awesome sex scene. So, boo on that. LOL, still I enjoyed your story.
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August 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
All i can say is the story was fantastic! and where can i read the epilogue?
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August 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this story & pairing!
Update soon!
Update soon!
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August 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm amazed, your style is really unique and I love how you write Grimmjow to be, act and speak. I also love all the detail that you have put into the fic and how you capture the cuteness of Nel. Can't wait to read how it all will end! Keep up the good work!
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August 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I can't belive the final chapter came so fast!! I don't want this story to end. It's so good!! Thanks for posting the stickiest lemonade ever. I can't wait to read grimmjow kicking ass!!! It was so awesome how he almost killed that girl. BRUTAL. thats grimmjow alright.Nel I hope she's okay! Oh and you gotta write one more lemon before you end this story. Maybe like a epilouge or something? Please?
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August 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was one of the best lemons I've ever read. Thank you on behalf of us perverts!! Can't wait for the next chap!
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July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Extra-concentrated syrup, PLEASE!! I'm talkin' dirty, can't-see-thru-molasses syrupy lemony-limeness. That sentence makes no sense, but I think it gets my point across, lol.
I like the new chappy [8]. I'm excited to see what you do next, especially with the limon. I like how Grim is his grouchy-tough-guy self, but Nel seems to be his lil weakness. It's sweet and totally believable. I think you did a great job in portraying Noitra; he's a psychotic jerk and you definitely pulled that off. All I can think about is if he's waiting for her to be alone; will he strike when she's waiting for Grimmy to get home? Who knows! Look forward to your next installment!
I like the new chappy [8]. I'm excited to see what you do next, especially with the limon. I like how Grim is his grouchy-tough-guy self, but Nel seems to be his lil weakness. It's sweet and totally believable. I think you did a great job in portraying Noitra; he's a psychotic jerk and you definitely pulled that off. All I can think about is if he's waiting for her to be alone; will he strike when she's waiting for Grimmy to get home? Who knows! Look forward to your next installment!
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July 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
HIGH CONCENTRATE SYRUP PLEASE!!!!! I Love this pairing!! you wrote them really well and i can't wait for the next chapter!!! GRIMM X NEL is my new favorite pairing it's so different and yet it really does go :) LOVE LOVE <3 I know your busy but seriously i'm gonna blow up if this next chapter is not out soon :D Thanks a tot for writing this i've been up all night reading all the chapters!!
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July 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sooo glad you updated. Nnoitra was really creapy, as he should, Bravo!! For the next chap, please please pleeeaase do the extra citrusy super acidic lemon!!! I'll forever be indebted to you. I love this couple, and there's just not that much out there. Thank you in advance.
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July 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
SYRUP!! :D I really like your story, I've been following for a few chapters now and thought it was about time I gave my appreciation :) Wow, Nnoitra is really freaky in this story. What a physco! Can't wait to read more. ~ Kazes.
P.s. (As an actual review) You need to watch that you don't jump from second to third person ; sometimes it can be okay, but not within a single paragraph. Other than that, there were only a few tiny things that are easy fixed, such as:
" It’s been two months since Neliel and Grimmjow began dating and the thought of their anniversary was weighing heavily on her mind."
Should have been "It had been..."
and,
“It’s only so much of your teasing I can take before I get you…”
Should have been, "There's only so much of your teasing I can take before I get you..."
If you like, I'm happy to beta for you. I know I hate not having a proof reader, but my good beta refuses to do oneshots, or AU (he's very fussy) and i.e. I often find myself longing for a second set of eyes. It wouldn't be much because, there isn't a lot that needs a second eye but, if you like I'd happy send you my thoughts pre-post.
Regards,
Kazes. sutaku@hotmail.com
P.s. (As an actual review) You need to watch that you don't jump from second to third person ; sometimes it can be okay, but not within a single paragraph. Other than that, there were only a few tiny things that are easy fixed, such as:
" It’s been two months since Neliel and Grimmjow began dating and the thought of their anniversary was weighing heavily on her mind."
Should have been "It had been..."
and,
“It’s only so much of your teasing I can take before I get you…”
Should have been, "There's only so much of your teasing I can take before I get you..."
If you like, I'm happy to beta for you. I know I hate not having a proof reader, but my good beta refuses to do oneshots, or AU (he's very fussy) and i.e. I often find myself longing for a second set of eyes. It wouldn't be much because, there isn't a lot that needs a second eye but, if you like I'd happy send you my thoughts pre-post.
Regards,
Kazes. sutaku@hotmail.com