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First off, I so would have added in my voice for every damn chapter that I loved, but when reading reviews on my own, it just looks like a crazy person appeared, and started to randomly type. I started reading the day before yesterday, and finished today. WOW, this monster in HUGE. Congratulations! Both on your personal stuff and your story. You cannot believe how relieved I was to see Yumi again. He's my top five favorite from Bleach. Poor Renji. He always seems to get the shaft. I really want to write a nice story for him where he doesn't get maimed or die horribly. And all the Szayel torture is making me cry. Please stop hurting him? Now to my best moment, when your story jerked me right out of my chair and made me bawl: Byakuya's reunion with Senbonzakura. It was so touching, compelling, beautiful...pick a positive adjective, it was amazing. Thank you for letting Juushiro live, please don't kill him now! Thank you for such an engaging read! I'll be back to check on it next week. Until then, stay away from WoW and write some more!

I just want to say, this is some of the best written fanfiction I have ever read-very detailed, a well thought out and designed plot that stays true to the characters and really examines their motives in a realistic fashion. I immensly enjoy the concept, the aftermath and many characters being claimed is such an exciting situation and it is interesting to see what will take place. I saw Ukitake's name mentioned, I am so glad he is in this and I surely hope his owner turns out to have a good living condition for him. I was initially very surprized with the pairing of Grimmjow and Karin but your fic has really made me enjoy their pairing and the potential of their relationship in this context. I am only on the sixth chapter and I cannot wait to read this in it's entirety. In addition, at the end of this chapter, the most stunning thing besides the intense confrontation between Grim & Uliqu and how you panned out this scene of Karin willinging pleasing Grim was the mention of golden eyes and mourning, I instantly flashed to Ichigo and I really have no clue how this will work out if our defeated shinigami makes a reapearance and yet, I hope that will occur and everything will be set right. However, I know that drama and tragedy earns more veiws so most likely, I assume that things may go down hill from here. Also, it deserves so many reveiws it is not funny so I hope this one could bring you a smile and know that your hardwork is being appreciated :)

Review Chapter 37: It has come to my attention that when you write Yammy and Byakuya you have the tendency to use the phrase "the other" rather frequently. Your writing is AMAZING, but just something that I noted is that you tend to stick with the same references over and over, with a story of this length you should try some more variation. Also it really surprises me how many small typos there are. Your vocabulary and sentence structure are great, but every now and again a word will be the wrong one (i.e. two, to, and too or your and you're) some could be simple typos but some come across confusing. I know how easy it is to skim over your own work and not notice because your brain automatically supplies what you meant; however, I was under the impression that someone betas your work and I would think that would be caught. The problems are no where near bad enough to cause me to quit reading or anything like that, but they do cause me to take pause here and there to step back and figure out what was meant. I love the romance with Nemu,and I have to agree with whoever mentioned it, that if you are going for more passion the addition of kisses is a great asset!

Review Chapter 39: Two random things to point out: 1) The food they eat would easily cost WAY more than thousands of yen. (Source: I live in Japan. Think of it this way 100 yen is approximately equal to 1.00, thus their 1,000 yen of food would only be $10.00 and beef and things are really expensive here) As a point to you I have no idea how the soul society would price food or if they would even use yen.... something I pondered due to this train of thought :P And of course this is a minor thing

2) Only because I think it will amuse you- Wild wolves purr. That's right, the big mighty beasts get all cute and cuddly when they are with their 'pack' and feeling loving. It takes a bit of getting used to because it is a little hard to tell the difference of a purr and a growl, but when you know them well you can tell. :P

I know that this story is already either finished or well near the end, but I still like to review when I find something to say whether it is criticism or random tidbits. :)

Yeah Tatsuki should definitely have a talk with Grimmjow, even if I must confess … it might sound a little strange “Listen here Grimmjow, human traditions say that you have to marry the one you mate with …” I really cannot imagine Grimmjow’s answer to this.

200 chapters or more o_O that’s one hell of a number, but I am not scared. Make as many as you want. Just keep the story as good as it is and I’ll be pleased. Truth to be told … I don’t know if you are capable of stopping me from loving your story *laugh*

Okay … going to the next chapter

Wow! We have a winner!
Okay … this chapter was, simply put, amazing! I’m not entirely sure, maybe it was just my imagination, but the words said by Barragen struck me as strange.
„One day you will lose your favor with Aizen-sama, and I will be waiting,” – a prevision, don’t know, but it definitely scared the shit out of me. As I said maybe it’s just my eye catching something unimportant, but if I’m right … *insert worried face here*

Also I guess it’s unexpected from him, who likes young boys (Grimmjow stated at some point of your story) to “want” a born arrancar. Maybe he is into children as well *smirk* freaking pedophile. His Majesty is a fetish freak!

Waiting for the next chapter and for Karin to find out about her daughter’s bad experience. I gotta confess … Ajuga is very instinctual: from knowing that Aizen and Yammy are bad to realizing that Barragen is interested in something less pleasant … I like her more and more.

You know this last part made me think about something regarding Ajuga’s instinct. I was little somewhere around 10, but I looked like a 7 year old kid. Anyway I was coming form my grandma’s house when there were two boys/men … don’t remember too well and one of them said “My friend has an erection. Can you help him with it?” that’s a word by word translation. I was 2 little to know about sex; I didn’t know what a penis was, so you can imagine … I was from this point of view as clueless as Ajuga.

I passed by and ignored them (you know the whole thing with do not talk with strangers; do not take candies from strangers), but instantaneously I knew it was bad; that it was something that could hurt me like hell. Strange as it seems it’s the only thing I got left in my memory from that period.

I feel somehow sorry for Ajuga because she’ll have to deal with this fear for a long time and I think she’ll never truly forget it.

Ok, so I'm not sure how the reviews work on this site, since this is my first time reviewing. Just in case they aren't chapter sensitive, I have read up to chapter 11/12? Toshiro's part. I wanted to leave a review and say that this story is amazing! I haven't read anything with a good plot to it on this site before, and I wanted to especially compliment the fact that you are trying to write things that you aren't used to. For your first yuri I think the chapter was pretty good. I think that it is great that you are stepping out of your comfort zone, and I have done the same by reading some parts of this story(as you said anything can be good if it is well written!). I think that the yuri lacked a bit of substance (but as you've said you sometimes use your own experiences and that doesn't really apply here I take it). I think that Toshiro's embarrassment was a good way to tone the chapter down a bit on the erotic notes. I've never been a Uliquorra fan and had never even dreamed of Grimmjow and Karin, but I like both pairings a lot the way you write them. If I find anything else I can lend some criticism I will review again! Just know that you are gaining some new readers and your story is fabulous!

Review: Chapter 17

Ok 2 things that made me laugh out loud: 1) "He'd have to find a new den to raise the young... one with better defences." I died. My husband and I are native american and we raise wolves at a wild life reserve and that comment just hit home for me! 2) "Chicks dig that sort of sensitive crap." I could just see the ever so slight contemplation that passed over that mostly impassive face! Maybe it is my mental image but such course language in such a nonchalant expression met with Uliquorra's over analytical nature was hysterical. Excellent job as always! Also, I'm not usually one who is a fan of pregnancy, but well this fic has been letting me enjoy things I generally wouldn't so I'm still on board!

hope juu is gonna be ok. can szayzel or orihime do something (more than whatever 4th squad has done til moment)? its your fic, so guess we'll know next chap. also wondered why ori didn't offer to use her shield to carry dear for ajuga (as she used it to catch ichigo when ulqui had blasted him in chest), given she's in full on maternal/caregiver mode.

loved that yumi got to be himself for a bit, & of course that ulqui came as soon as he felt ori's fear, as a good papa/hubby should. that was a smile-on-face moment for me after the tense skeeviness induced in barragan scene (such a creep)! thx for that. good luck on sonogram (hope all is good news & you & baby are healthy)