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Forgot to mention ... Szayel would be asked to surgically modify Yammy the same way he did Byakuya to make it impossible for Yammy to make threats, call spells, or beg for mercy. As for the bug ... Baseline readings of all possible types would be done beforehand then evaluated against readings after the feeding ... Then the bug would be dissected to compare with a non-fed dissected one.

It makes my day whenever I see that you've updated this story! And I must say, this is my favorite question so far! How would I kill Yammy? It would definitely be something very, very painful. Although, I think that I would prefer that he actually be kept alive and castrated and tortured and raped severely over and over again. He needs to suffer quite a bit for everything he's done to poor Byakuya! I'm all for cruel and unusual punishment! I can't wait to see what you have in store for Yammy......

I haven't got around to reading chapter 40 but I skipped to the end (you know so I could find out where in the chapter the rape was) and I saw the question on how should you kill Yammy. And before I started reading the chapter I had already made up my mind on how Yammy should die because you made me hate him so much for what he did for Byakuya. I think he should be spits-ed to death with either a pole, spear, sword or really what ever would be long enough to get the job done and ram it up his butt all the way through his mouth.

Totaly,totaly,totaly LOVE this fic...
So get off you'r thums and do more
chappies PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE..O_0..
I want to know what happens next..Keep
up the good work,and if anyone gives ya
flames..XD..Take out you'r flamthrower
and FLAME them back..;)

I have been following this story for quite some time now, and I am truly sorry for not having reviewed before. It just seemed redundant to me to be posting "great job" as a review every chapter. Introducing the author's question at the end of every chapter is a brilliant move on your part, because it will probably get ghost readers like me to respond in the form of a review.

I am loving your story so far, even if the darker chapters horrify me, and I applaud you for keeping all the characters more or less i/c, especially Karin and Grimmjow. The character development has been well executed, and the interactions between the characters believable. However, you do have quite a bit of spelling and grammatical errors that you might want to take note of, even if they do not detract from the story in general.

That said, I like the interactions between Grimmjow and Karin in this chapter, and one gets hints of how in tune they are with the other. These locusts seem to be developing into a real threat, and I can't wait to see how this plays out.

And to answer your question, I think that it is probably unnecessary to split the story when major time skips occur, since you are essentially telling the same story. It would probably be better to keep it all together in one story, and add in indicators of a major time skip, like "5 Years Later" or something. This is just a suggestion, though; it is still the author's preogative.

Wow. That was a long first review. XD

Before reading the AN I so had a vague feeling on where this is going, at least a some point. This may be a 'filler' chapter to you but it's entertaining, suspenseful and enough of a fun read to keep me wide awake *is feeling sleepy and had just belatedly checked out AFF for any updates* Bonus points for having Grimmjow in his resurreccion -it needs more love~~

Ad for question...hmm...I'd say keep 'em together.

Still enjoying your story. I'd say leave the filler in, I, and others I'm sure are really enjoying your writing style.
As an idea for a small divergence, you might try doing a pairing with Nell/Ichigo. Could even do a threesome with Rukia. Since hollows seem to value the strength of their mates, that pairing would make sense. Could possibly even involve a pregnancy.

the grimkarin scene was sweet & sexy. still hoping someone will do artwork of ajuga--she sounds so adorable! heck, the scene w/karin, hana, & ajuga sleeping together makes a great lil family scene if i had any art talent.

can't wait till the ladies are all under one roof. sisterhood time! plus, maybe hime will get more of the baby bug if she's around hana & ajuga. am hoping for a chance for the ladies to kick butt & prove their worth/badassness.

Just finished reading all 38 chaps and I am eagerly awaiting the next one. I never thought about karin and grimmjow being a couple but the way u portrayed them in this story has turned me into a shipper :)

Here's my essential problem: It's all well and good that Karin, Nanao, Ukitake, and now Orihime have managed to find a detente with their captors. In Karin and Orihime's case, they were lucky enough to fall into the care of Espada that had some type of honour and the ability to respect. Starrck, on the other hand, has always been more lackadaisical than anything else, so I can understand the equilibrium established between him and his 'guests'. The problem is, for the others, this is just not true. If you just wanted to write about affection and understanding and love between disparate indidividuals that would be one thing, but including the chapters with Byakuya, Rangiku, Gin, Toushirou, et al, makes this more than that. These people are being tortured...sexually and otherwise. Somewhere, somehow, sometime there has got to be a wake-up call. It can't all be light and sunshine and swimming while comrades are walking around like zombies. Since Karin is the main focus of your story she's the one that's going to have to wake up and face the truth. She can't be allowed to hide behind Grimmjow and the miracle baby without having to face the nightmare reality of so many others. Not just the main 'Bleach' characters of course, but the other women your story mentioned being 'claimed' as well. It is rape, and there is no going around that.
I'm definitely not saying that your story is incredibly addictive...I want to find out what happens, but there is only so long you can concentrate on the idyllic before the ugly details you've already introduced will intervene. I know that the dark stuff is hard to write, and the light stuff flows so incredibly easily, but you have to pay the piper and write it. This world of love bubble Karin is currently living in cannot last.
That's my rant. I truly believe that what you are writing is heading somewhere grand and dark and enlightening all at the same time, and I'm along for the ride with you. But, there is some serious retribution waiting to be doled out here, and some serious, heart-breaking questions that need to be asked. I can't wait.