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by NovaAlexandria

person JOler
schedule April 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Family history? Ajuga's? Karin's? Grimmjow's? ... Szayel's?
New experiment? Hmmm ... Makin' someone human to try and get 'em knocked up, or just borrowing the real thing for the attempt?
Poor Renji explained? Hope he's not the one Szayel 'gets some' from. Not too crazy about the thought of Namu either ... But since my first choice to see him with, Tatski, belongs to someone else he may just have to settle for what he has unless he's able to beg, borrow, or steal (highly unlikely) her from Ulquiora.

Will be interesting to see if Noitra is still able to pull off being a gentleman when Rangeku returns from the baby shower (wonder if he, and the other males have figured out what it is yet).

Hmmm... Those bugs sound too much like Naraku's bugs ... Hope this doesn't turn into a crossover.

What is a 'plus' ... And are the visords being ignored by the bugs?

Hope Byakuya's voice can be restored and maybe if we're (and Byakuya's) very lucky the next bug victim will be Yammy. (don't want Grimmjow, Ulquiora, Starrk/Lilinette, Szayel, or the new gentleman Noitra hurt though ... Might as well include Tesra with them, he's very supportive of Rangeku).

Now time to tackle the review question...

Ichigo's response ... A moment of stunned silence as he processes what he's been told ... Followed be laughing so hard he pisses his hakama and can't stop. The only thing he can manage to say is something almost incoherent about Hollows ... Balls ... and Prissy Nobel's.

Rukia's response ... Stunned silence and disbelief, having to hear it several times because she's sure she heard something wrong. Finally fighting the urge to laugh at the image of her brother in one of her more feminine yukatas ... And kicking the crap out of Ichigo with threats to make him as close to female as is humanly possible if he doesn't stop laughing and get more serious about finding a way to perform a rescue soon.

Of course both will probably freeze and forget all about Byakuya the moment Karin's baby is mentioned ... Then Rukia will have to hold Ichigo back to keep him from storming into the now arrancar occupied Soul Society to neuter himself one blue-haired kitty cat.

Mofaf1
person bleachfan7
schedule April 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
so glad i was able to read a bya chap! am hoping yammy is killed so bya can be freed, & that hime can reverse szayzel's work on bya (b/c it was done at yammy's request & he's no longer in picture, so why not get rid of it). his ruminations of karin vs ichi were amusing. baby sounds adorable. new threat--will it have to do w/crossbreeding? did that throw off universe balance or something bizarre? or is there a new baddie that created the locusts & will be challenging aizen for dominance? update soon pls
person Codry
schedule April 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So, what did Byakuya have to do in order to “convince” Yammy to let him go? … This is clearly a rhetorical question asked by someone that read all your previous chapters :D

To answer your own question:
Ichigo would say: “That noble with a carrot in his ass, wearing girly clothing … no way in hell”
And Rukia would reply “Don’t talk like this about my nii-sama”
Ichigo *dashing back in Soul Society* “Gotta go see this … it may be my last chance”
Rukia *screaming* … come back here in this instant Kurosaki Ichigo or I swear you’ll sleep on the couch for the next century.
schedule April 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Alright. First off, I have to say..

OH MY GOD I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY.

I honestly didn't know what to expect when I first clicked on the link in the archives and yet, the more I read, the more I seriously grew to enjoy the story. I don't exactly see a 'happy ending' here, but I admit that the pairings you've come up with have made me smile, stare in shock or cry out at what's happening to the characters. Poor, poor Yumichika. Poor, poor, POOR Byakuya. Oh god, Byakuya I feel so sorry for and I seriously want to see a happy ending at some point for him.

I sat and read all 34 chapters in one go too and I don't do that too often with fanfics. The last one of this kind of length where I did sit down and read everything in one go was Silvershine's House of Crows over on ffdotnet. So, for me to sit and read everything that's out, well.. It was honestly a very stunning, spectacular read. And I *love* the idea of Claiming. It's a very believable situation and while I can't see Grimmjow being so.. gentle at times, I do admit that it is a wonderful portrayal of one of my favorite Espada.

I also laugh with all the abuse that Szayel seems to be getting and I am *also* in love with Aizen's utter seeming indifference to the goings-on of his domain. Everything about it is excellent, from Gin's sneaky handed prevention of Unohana getting pregnant to Grimmjow's obvious caring to the gentle blossoming of affection between Orihime and Ulquiorra, although their relationship felt very.. stilted at first. But I enjoyed that too because it was a showing of the 'abuse' she was being put through.

And, now that I've rambled on long enough, I have to say this: Oh god please update soon I NEED MORE.
person Onba
schedule April 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
You know Ulqui is right about the infectious disease because it looks like Hime has contracted the baby bug! He's too late for a vaccination though!
person kamiyoni
schedule April 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I finally got around to checking out this fic, mainly to find out if you had done anything with Hitsugaya and Harribel, to which I am pleasantly surprised you did what I've had ideas on for a while now, as I've seen a few fics that explored the pairing but that haven't been update or never really went anywhere, but this the first to actually explore not just Hitsu/Harribel but also including her Fracción in the relationship. Although I can say, the actual sex at the end was rather short, but I do appreciate that chapter a lot none the less.

Now being that was the only chapter I really read, I've skimmed some the rest and see you've done nice work developing the characters in this alternate time line. Although it would be nice to see more on the part of Hitsugaya and Harribel, and/or if possible the idea of them having a baby (in a far more out there scenario, her [i]and[/i] her Fracción having children with Toushiro.)
schedule April 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So sorry I haven't reviewed! (I had a horrible writer's block on all of my Bleach stuff), but I loved these last two chapters. The suspense is killing me though in certain areas (what are Aizen's plans... I love a grand mystery. He's always up to something. Hehehehe...) And what you said in one of your A/Ns is so right. Kissing scenes can be a pain in the butt at times. I have a tendency of being descriptive in everything sexual and when I write kissing scenes I'm like... HOLYCRAP it's like more than a hundred words to describe one kiss! *passes out exhausted* That's why I tend to avoid writing them. And I'll admit to start getting a little hopeful about a possible Ulqui/Hime baby. That's just me and my wishful thinking *blushes* Man!
person drix
schedule April 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Another amazing chapter. I really like the Orihime moments with Ulquiorra. I can't wait for more. Especially I want to find out how Rangiku got Tesra to get her the the shower.
person Rosezina
schedule April 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
this is a wonderful story that just pulls u in cant wait to seen what happens next. please update soon.
person bleachfan7
schedule April 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
adored this chap! i am a deep lover of fluffy (i know lots of readers hate fluffy, so sue me). the mom yearnings in hime were believable (being childless i've had them aplenty & the scene rang true) & ulqui talking himself out of going to grim was funny. the giggles & cooing of baby showers we've all experienced & i thank you for not drawing out the scene too much, instead drawing focus to the main events of the strange gifts. really hope aizen doesn't try to mess w/our 2 main couples. & really hope we come to an ulquihime baby soon (a boy) that can be both playmate & partner (if fic goes into them being grown) for ajuga. its cutesy but fitting. hybrids should/would stick together. hope we get ranny able to 'fix' nnoi too. i want happiness for all our characters that have been thru so much in this 'verse. there's not enough shinigami power to overthrow aizen, but if his key espada & their claims united, they could take him down w/o a civil war being necessary. don't know if this is even close to where fic is headed (you are many chaps into this based on old a.n.)...