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by Sweety8587

schedule January 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow!!!

obviously, steamy, but leaves impression they are adults & have been together a long time (married or living together). even though they don't say 'i love you' in drabble (?) it definitely is one of the more 'loving' lemons i've read.
person elvareth
schedule March 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
It's not 'okairi' it's 'okaeri' from 'kaeru' meaning to be going back/to return.
Please don't use words you don't understand and can't spell right. Out of all, it just sounds weird inside a story written in English.

About the fic itself, well, there's just too much descriptions in it. Some parts sound really awkward. Every paragraph is like the repetition of the previous just in different words. Some parts were good, but in most part it wasn't that great. Writing a good PWP is really a challenge, and I think people underestimate it.
schedule September 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
That was a nice IchiHime interlude. I needed that! But yes, just like you I wish it was longer.
schedule September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Ichigo really let loose! Hehehehe... He seems to be quite the stallion!