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I just love this story- it's such a different take than what I normally read. Keep up the great work and update soon!

I always look forward to an update. I hope that you keep posting the story on this site. A lot of exciting things are coming about. Well, they have been all along. I can just imagine the cubs surrounding Jyuushiro, and him loving it. The million dollar question is, where is Mayuri?

fantastic chapter!!! i can't wait until ichigo's egg gets laid, ten bucks says its more then one!!!! ^-^ with H'tsu being so strong and the drain weakening him so much it seems logical! update soon!!!!

what a lovely chapter. its like the calm before the storm. cant wait to see how ichigo takse to having the egg

finally. i've been checking the site everyday to so if you have updated the story. i love it its getting more inteesting every chapter. cant wait to see how Syazel heals. this is one of the best blech stories ive read. kept up the good work

I am so happy to read your updates. This is the first time that I have got a chance to read since october and was not dissapointed in it one bit. so many good things to say that I cant remember them. :)

You've got me addicted to your stories!! I can't wait for more!!

Even with all the blood and killing in this latest chapter, I must say that was a beautiful chapter. All of the details were sot on. I as a tad blindsided by the sudden lovebirds, but somehow it works. AMAZING job, as always ;)

Hi! After ...I don't know...5 days I finally caught up with this FF. I have to tell you, it's great! You did some research for animal's behaviour in packs, didn't you? :) It seems all so natural and it's sooo complex. And I like how you keep everyone nice in character (that's really not something you find often in fanfictions). Even though I was surprised how well did everyone take the fact that Ichigo was sleeping with an arrancar (a male one at that) and what I noticed the most was, that every friend/collegue/familly member was immediately accustomed to listening to him talking about packs, hierarchy and such. Since that is not something you (as a human or shinigami) hear families to call themselves...

I wanted to complain at first, 'coz there was this part, when Ichigo commented on Rukia's promotion with something like -Byakuya finally let you...- and I was like "what does HE have to do with it? She doesn't even belong to his division. She's in Ukitake's.." but then it was cleared and I was left with nothing to complain ;) (Not that complaining is something I like to do. It's just that that little bit stood out a lot)

But (and I'm sorry for that) I have to point out some (grammatical/spelling) errors:
- "mettle" is spelled "metal" as I believe, you mean something steel, iron, aluminum, etc. (e.g. "metal rod","metal cage")
- with "tuff" if you want to say "something is going to be hard", "someone with strong character/personality", "a problem is hard to solve"... it's spelled "tough" (e.g. "it's gonna be tough to break through")
- and sometimes you don't use the correct form of verbs in some phrases. When you want to say "someone has adapted to something" it's "someone is used to something" or "someone is accustomed to something" - "someone got used to something" or "I'm adapting to.." - "I'm getting used to.." and so on... The verb "use" is used in past form :)

I have the impression you don't have a beta...so it's still not that bad ;) And I'm sorry, if I didn't get right some of the words you wanted to actually use and I misinterpreted them, or if you have some sort of automatic correction on and it's not your fault ('coz "mettle" IS an existing word. It just means something different (http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=mettle))

In the end, all I want to say is that you crated an interesting story with intriguing plot and I'm looking forward for the next chapter.

yay they rescued him. soo happy. cant wait to find out what happens to kurosuchi. this story kepts getting better and better