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October 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chap 1 - I'm not the best at reviewing works but reading them is so fun! All I have to do now is translate thought into word...So here we go! :D There's just something about men with long hair...it brings such a sensational image to mind. I always liked the idea of Renji with his hair down, and "cascading" as it's taken down, ABSOLUTELY! *swoon* Your first chapter has definitely painted good mental pictures in my mind, and their personalities I want to know more of! I'm thinking Byakuya is more confident than Renji. The way Renji's stuttering a little and trying not to be too forward stirs my curiosity, is he a shy boy? Maaaybe...maybe not... *squirms* I think it's up to Byakuya to loosen Renji up a bit. :3 Hee Hee. I relate to dancing (like Byakuya mentioned) to express the self, definitely a good point made there. I can't wait to read chapter 2...in fact if I can stay awake I might just do that! :3
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October 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Renji is so cute in this story. I look forward to more. I'm glad you found your muse. Thanks for all your hard work.
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October 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This was really good. Nice try for a first time. It's a perfect place to stop if you're not going to finish. Go any further and your readers might be upset if you let the story drop. Using an outline for your story is a big help in planning how you want it to roll. I think you have some talent. Good luck in the future.