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for Melting Snow

by BookMaggot

person Raymy
schedule October 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
It finally came to me! Were you going for the word 'gale'? meaning: a very strong wind.
person satterb
schedule October 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This was sweet and sexy. Thank you for sharing. I will always be checking out what you post, so please post more often if you can.
person Raymy
schedule October 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
"Yayness". Exactly how I feel. Can't wait for the updates to your other stories.

I like this little oneshot. The pairing is sweet, neither one of them being too forthright or overbearing. I have a soft spot for self-discovery themes. That Toshiro was sure no one could melt his cold armour, only to be happily proved wrong.

My only question is regarding the use of the word 'glade'. I feel you use it differently than what I know of it. I tried the dictionary to get 'an open space in a forest'. When I googled 'winter glade', I got images of a forest glade in winter. Perhaps it is a cultural thing?
schedule October 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This was beautifully written. I enjoyed the descriptive writing. I could almost feel winter's breath. Please keep writing. It can only get better.