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*glomps* You're back!

And with a wicked chapter to boot!

I must say I have a strong liking for the title 'Uruhara's Shame' it comes across as something that doesn't make a lot of sense. Like 'Dry Ice' and 'freeze burns' you can never quite manage to picture it in your head XD

As always the pacing and story is brilliant, and your characters are done to the tee, especially Uruhara. When I read your stories I always find myself admiring the way you capture the subtleties of the characters with seemingly little effort. You bring them over in such a fantastic and elegant way it's honestly hard to pin point where exactly you do it. I think that's just brilliant writing.

But talk about a cliffy XD Oh Ichigo you mad lovable bastard you, he never takes any crap from the poor scientist. I say poor only in a figurative sense as literally he's a conniving bastard in his own right.

But don't you dare follow my example and leave us hanging for months on end -_-

I eagerly await the next update ^_^

P.S: My favourite part was 'Yourichi cat' it was just ADORABLE!

Very nicely done chapter with the characters retaining the feel of being well developed. I do enjoy how you stay true to the characterization while working through the chapter's plotting. As a rule I do not often like reading multiple POV shifting chapters because of poor handling for character shifts. However,m you form remains truer to the older and correct formula of a limited God perspective Point of View with each shift in each character through the complete paragraph. Each shift is appropriate to the character's personality so it makes for an interesting transitional phase as you settle on each character's view, and move to the next. I appreciate seeing that someone does know how to use that technique well.

I like how you have Urahara attempting to meet his students halfway in this specific chapter. Ruthless as he is, Urahara does have a compassionate side, and it is nice to see his cunning take a back seat to his more human qualities. Keeping most of this in his perspective is quite fitting since he makes an excellent glue to bring the diverse side trips into other character's perspectives out with a sense of clarity that would be missing if his was not the dominant POV for the chapter.

I can also guess where Ichigo is going to go with his explosive entrance. Can't wait to see if I am correct about my theory, if only because Ichigo's hollow is such a character! I can see him giving flack if only because the strong hollow persona, I can see Ichigo being very cranky with the lecture. Snickers. Keep writing my friend, and I shall keep reading.

Reading chapter 5 was entertaining. I like the fact that you blended the original storyline with an off stage type scene to round out the chapter. It is also quite a normal thing for people with South American Indian heritages to use things like pot or peyote in the spiritual context. It looks like you did some great research the really brought Chad's other heritage to the fore. I like to see stories that keep things in context. Chad's descriptions of his ideal about love and death are quite Amerindian in nature in many respects. I found the characterization very good. Thanks for sharing this.

Wow, I can see the twisted captain going overboard like he's planning this round quite easily. I did not see Mayuri as being a very ethical person when I watched the series recently. You really nail Mayuri's proclivity for psychosis in this particular storyline beautifully. Good characterization is very difficult to nail faithfully, but I think you really have the mad scientist down pat. I look forward to reading more of this twisted scheme just so I can grin about a great internal monologue that fits the charater very well. Keep writing. :)

Uryū & Chad in a Joint Venture

I have been hiding under a rock but now I am back to keep reading these wonderful chapters!
Poor Orihime...meek human being... Heh. Initially that shouldn't be a bad thing (it doesn't seem like a bad to me, yet).
Uryu comes off as very independent and cautious. If he's "difficult to convince" and feeling "exceptionally alone with this burden" as well as wishing he "could confide in someone" I'd say that's a recipe for some more than slight suppression (which may lead to depression). He seems smart, but sensitive.
Well at least Uryu talked to someone. Urahara seems mature, it's a good thing Uryu confided in him (his father seems closed minded).
"Chap" Urahara would use a word like that. Heh!
Ichigo and the word "destined"...[if Ichigo's character follows cannon] those two just hop in bed with each other. To this segment about Ichigo (brought up in the midst of talk over Uryu's problem) I felt refreshed. The focus stayed on Uryu and didn't shift to our little orange haired uber-protagonist. You've done a good job making me like Uryu and keeping my thoughts on him.
I've been privy to a preview of your story so when I read (or reread) that Uryu was going to go to Chad's first and see Inoue after I laughed...hard. VERY HARD. Thinking about them showing up on her door-step after...fornicating (or something no less passionate)...with their hair fluffed and clothes badly straitened was just too much. Oh such a dirty mind... I feel that if I were a reader without having previewed this chapter I wouldn't know exactly what to expect from Chad's sudden invitation. ("Joint Venture", now I know for certain you like playing with puns! So clever, so clever!)
"...their last get-together." Yep! That spells sexual/personal interest. "Needle" as a verb, hee hee! Oh no...here we go...Ichigo and the broken bass. I believe I used the word 'sin' to describe that before. The s-word still stands. (Interlude: I love the way, "As an accomplished tailor with a touch of the divine in his fingertips, Ishida could appreciate Sado’s deft artistry on the bass,..." is phrased and what it addresses. I'm in total agreement with 'similarity breeds appreciation' idea here.)
"It was during one of their weekend afternoon retreats, playing Guitar Hero, that Kurosaki grabbed Sado’s prized guitar and went AC/DC on it. Needless to say, the Substitute Shinigami won another battle that day, and the loser was the Fender Precision Bass." Laughing...so hard...again. Ouch. Hurts to breathe. This brings me back to that whole enjoyment of how you include Ichigo but keep my focus on other characters. You're still doing it, and well.
"Sado could sense Ishida staring at him, but it didn’t bother him as he was very comfortable in his own skin." the brings to mind a sincere 'good for him (Chad)' moment. Ooooh, so Chad AND Ichigo are fans of Mary Jane. Hee Hee.
Life to the fullest... There's conflict about that between Chand and Uryu. It seems that this chapter is implying that the 'fullest' is when you have 'freedom' or when one feels 'freed', but that's just my take on it.
"It seemed the “anxiety medicine” was having the desired effect." agreed, about it working and it being "anxiety medicine". Uryu is definitely competitive when it comes to Ichigo, that's an interesting relationship for them. As for Uryu and Chad's relationship, even being not a very big fan of the Uryu and Chad pairing, I must say you've made it quite sweet. *smiles* The words 'slow/relaxed' and 'tender' also come to mind. For the dialogue though I catch the sensual and seductive vibes. In simple terms the way they speak is seductive, without being overkill or crass.
"...reflecting on your thoughtful insight just brings out such passion..." intellectual stimulation, Uryu you devil! Hee Hee, how delicious.
"“Do not, under any circumstances, stop talking.”" That made me laugh. Uryu definitely seems controlling but not too pushy, just enough get what he wants out of the encounter.
You know, Chad's speaking of life and death makes me think about tragic heroes.
"Inoue Orihime was tired of waiting for Ishida and decided to go over to Sado’s on her own." that sentence shook, rattled, and rolled me. DO NOT DISTURB. Well if they're finished by all means disturb. I love how Orihime seems to being to 'grow some' by the end. Less meek than I thought, maybe...

What a heart warming and delicious chapter this was! You did a wonderful job editing! I continue to enjoy your writing, and I await the next chapter with bated breath! :o

I have been a little busy of late and only got to this story today, and low and behold two whole chapter sfor me to read! I was certianly excited so I dived right into the first one with unbridleded eagernesz andl endedssss upper withl bizzle snizzle whizzle floggen dogi shooon woggle flipple flop flip

*Thud*

... thats wasss friggins awesomez

Okay, concussion dealt with, I am reviewing both chaptes in this review... cuz I can :D

Chapter 4: 'Wow' is a word I don't think covers it all that well. Awesome is a bit better but still doesn't do it so let's just go with 'Superawesometaculertimessix'... yeah that about does it. Writing, I'm not even going to say anything about that, it's always brilliant no matter what you do. In hotness... just...just... jushshible- no! I told myself I was going to get through this dammit it! Aver eyes, aver eyes! okay, calm breaths... phew... I found the songs an interesting add on to the story. They kinda gave a cool timeline so you know how long it's going on... which is pretty rare. I mean I can give a perfect timeline here... which aweseome! The story is perfection as always.

Chapter 5:

It was just so sweeeeet. I don't know it just tugged at the heart strings and had me 'aweing' more times than I could count. I've always had a secret fangirl flag for chad/uryuu and I feel you just nailed this right out of the park. It was perfect, I know I say that a lot but it just is. I loved how you convyed Uryuu in this, scratched and dug and poked at that vulnrability that he hides like a vampire but that manahed to shine through so perfectly here. And exposing that human need to be with someone. I found it heart warming, and so beautiful. A perfect coupling... that only the magic of weed could let come to pass. :) Ten thumbs up and I eagerly wait for the next installment! :D

I don't know if this is just yaoi, but I'm hoping for Ichigo/Orihime.

If you're going to inject someone into Orihime, how about Hallibel or Nel?

If you pick Hallibel then you could have a serious determined Orihime, if you pick Nel you could have a goofy Orihime with an ass kicking mode...

Or you could pick Cirruci Whateverthehellhernameis and have Orihime go Dominatrix and make Ichigo submit to his Queenie.

Urk, hit submit too soon!

You could have OrihimeCirruci make the other girls submit to Queen Inoue, King Ichigo and Lord Ogichi. I'm sorry if it's a terrible.

No offense but the constant references to songs is kind of annoying.